Thank You

I was lost, drowning in a deep blue sea

Never did I know what you were doing for me.

 

You lay me to dry in a vast desert plane

And alone, I built up my own garden again;

 

Flawed, green and delicate, but strong and proud

From the blood I shed and the sweat of my brow.

 

You left me there, alone to live

Little did I know it was the greatest gift you could give.

 

You led me to something I will never forget

The greatest of knowledge and of treasures yet

 

And through the care of my soul, the care for above

I found  the truest, and deepest, and greatest of love.

 

So now I shed my tears, not now for want of your touch

But for endless gratitude, friend!

 

I can’t thank you enough.

Author's Note

Comments and critiques are appreciated.

Reviews

[WesleyAlexanderDavies]

appreciation of abandonment is a relatively forgotten but important aspect of parenting and friendships. i like your descriptive explanation but maybe use more vivid language so the reader isn't sure you appreciate the abandonment or recent it until the last line. Very well fleshed out concept though.

[annabellee]

Such a gorgeous poem, it flows very well and your rhyming is just perfect. I loved every single line.
Well done :)