An ode to desolation

An ode to desolation

A Story by Jeannette Lunete

"The soft illusion that it was ordinary to recall your ghosts never faded away. I called you Summer when you were my cloudiest autumn. I ripped the shadows out of the walls to make you the only one passing my footprints. Leave the skill to blind me behind you or I will never see again. Make it stop. Or I will." Mr. Robinson wrote these lines before the storm came and all the ink kissed the sky instead of the paper. 

Mr. Robinson kissed the gates of lucid dreams after he lost his beloved chameleon Summer. 
Summer was a mentalistic breakthrough. He reflected the colours of Mr. Robinson's lucid dreams. 
Mr. Robinson would always shut the door hystericaly after seeing the sky in a wrong shade of blue.
Mr. Robinson could steal the patience of a therapist but the cactus tapestry in his toilet can listen too.
Mr. Robinson ignores humanity, because humanity is a stubborn leech.
Mr. Robinson hates ukulele players that don't offer him a pinacolada.
Mr. Robinson should embrace the order in every chaos.

After dealing with this nature you should beware. Mr. Robinson loves to confuse. He loves to contrast and to deliver you nonsense. However it doesn't matter anymore. Mr. Robinson lost his footprints and got instead the zest that brand new wings bring you.

© 2014 Jeannette Lunete


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You are a amazing writer. You know how to use words to make them have life. This story told me of thoughts and places hidden and secret. I like the title. I like the set-up of the short story.
"Mr. Robinson wrote these lines before the storm came and all the ink kissed the sky instead of the paper. "
The ending me with the wish to read more. I like poetry that test the mind. Your story did. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks Coyote for this great support. I immensely appreciate it! :)



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i need to come back to this one ... it is a glimpse ..into a world that few acknowledge nor comprehend .. that is my first impression ..but as i said ..must read again .. hope you feel love and the peace of your expression .. getting it out is huge .. well done .. a voice in the wilderness says i!
E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Your style is very unique, and it drags me in quite easily... I simply love it! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dear friend. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It means quite a lot to me. :)
Unknown

9 Years Ago

Aww, you're welcome... ;)
The way you tell this story is amazing. I really enjoy the imagery and the way your heart or this character's heart is shared with us throughout such interesting moments, observations, and beliefs. This is a phenomenal write, excellently penned.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks PaintedPheonix for this delightful review. It means a lot to me. :)
What a writing! I ended here as I clicked the wrong link apparently? Apparently noT! Aren't I happy of that moment of fate. From the start, the use of contrasts, figurative writing, symbolisms and mosaics of imagination are an assault to the senses but in the best of ways. The ghost of darkness is what the Summer was all about. Dusk has never warm so intently! As a way to stop then the unfolding lines bring Mr robinson to the rescue. But was he? Just like the shady character in Kaspar Hauser he comes with dealings and wheelings and it so happens at times one form of darkened can only be managed by another which in turn....... . Yeah you guessed it! It forces a freeing act!.

Wonderfully creative!

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Rene! This is the most delightful and magnificent review I read so far. I can j.. read more
Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

Oh my pleasure it is a treasure of a writing .....
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You are a amazing writer. You know how to use words to make them have life. This story told me of thoughts and places hidden and secret. I like the title. I like the set-up of the short story.
"Mr. Robinson wrote these lines before the storm came and all the ink kissed the sky instead of the paper. "
The ending me with the wish to read more. I like poetry that test the mind. Your story did. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks Coyote for this great support. I immensely appreciate it! :)
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ANM
This is a great little story that conjures up such lovely imagery, your use of words brings home your meaning with great aplomb! A short story needs to encompass all that a reader wants and you capture this very well bravo!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I am glad that the concept of my writing style fits you. :)
ANM

9 Years Ago

You are most welcome!
This is a very interesting piece you've created here. I enjoyed reading it. Imagery was strong. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks for this kind words of laudation, I appreciate it. :)
Interesting and compelling write, enjoy the read!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot. I am glad that Mr. Robinson recalled joy and interest. :)
A. Amos

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome my friend...
Incredible imagery! Enjoyed it alot keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I am glad that you enjoyed it. It means a lot to me. :)

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