Homo homini lupus

Homo homini lupus

A Story by Jeannette Lunete

"Iron vertebrae are breaking courage in your shelter. It is not legitimate to speak while you are sighing. I understand."
The last drop of Bourbon stunned his liver. He spits out his final charm.
"My eyes are full of lemon drops while I speak to you."
Now the shadow is trying to escape. This man can't even dance the Moonwalk. Lame.
"You know that I get shaky when you look at me like that. Stop being so disgusted. Do you think that I enjoy being the King on a chessboard called Subsistence?"
His iris is now turning into a mosaic fragment of unbeaten illusions. 
"I could fall for you but I am still on the ground. "
The visage is whispering tranquility. 
" Don't you imitate my pattern, you cannot handle the kink of  being in the wrong puzzle."
Finally the enemy takes a bow. The pieces of the mirror are on the ground. He sees a reflection. It could almost be him.

© 2014 Jeannette Lunete



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ANM
The many facets of the human being what appears is not always that which lies beneath... Lovely word formation that sparks great imagery.Bravo!


Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much ANM. I am glad that you enjoyed it. :)
ANM

3 Years Ago

I did very much!
Your writing style is absolutely beautiful in all of your works, and I absolutely love the feelings and emotion gained from reading each line of this piece. I love the realizations the subjects come to, and how I as a reader can find relations to these realizations. "It could almost be him" got me the most because I feel as though we loose ourselves sometimes, and it takes near break downs or falling apart to realize our changes. Just my interpretations. Great work.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much jzadski for these encouraging and inspiring words. I am glad that you like it. I.. read more
My eyes are full of lemondrops while I speak to you. Fascinating and surreal conversation here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot TL Boehm. It means a lot me that you like it. :)
THIS one...was real and left quite an aftertaste... well spoken, well written.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Chris

3 Years Ago

Just being real... You've thoughts and the talents to express yourself. Don't get too lost in arcan.. read more
Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

I will do my best to get out of the impasse. :)
Chris

3 Years Ago

chuckling here... touche`
You went right for the jugular here, like the back & forth conversation, makes the essence of your story come to life...it's truly a pop in the eye in the truest sense.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Frieda. I truely appreciate these encouraging words. :)
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Pleasure was all mine, well done! :)
stinging ... searing ... scorching are some words that come to mind .. i think you have a marvelous way of putting this story down .. every line is like hot needle to the eye ball .. i think this is really good stuff! nice work! well done says i! keep going .. i will buy your book :)
but you have to sign it! ;)
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Einstein Noodle. I am glad that you enjoyed the story. It would be a pleasure for me to.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ok! i am holding you to it!
man. "the kink of being in the wrong puzzle."

"my eyes are full of lemon drops while I speak to you."

Stories of this length are my favourite kind, when they're like this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Waconda. I'm glad that you liked it. :)
I love the line "The last drop of Bourbon stunned his liver. He spits out his final charm." Wonderful writing...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. I am glad you liked it. :)
Very nicely written! Such compact story-telling is rare these days. Not a word wasted. I'm too long winded for this kind of thing. You have a confident voice and clear understanding of your character. Impressive.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jeannette Lunete

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Jim for this encouraging words. :)

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