Homo homini lupus

"Iron vertebrae are breaking courage in your shelter. It is not legitimate to speak while you are sighing. I understand."

The last drop of Bourbon stunned his liver. He spits out his final charm.
"My eyes are full of lemon drops while I speak to you."

Now the shadow is trying to escape. This man can't even dance the Moonwalk. Lame.

"You know that I get shaky when you look at me like that. Stop being so disgusted. Do you think that I enjoy being the King on a chessboard called Subsistence?"

His iris is now turning into a mosaic fragment of unbeaten illusions. 

"I could fall for you but I am still on the ground. "

The visage is whispering tranquility. 

" Don't you imitate my pattern, you cannot handle the kink of  being in the wrong puzzle."

Finally the enemy takes a bow. The pieces of the mirror are on the ground. He sees a reflection. It could almost be him.

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Well Jeannette I can confess to admiring your writing. I have lost all power of objectivity and my reviews therefore have gone from Dominant to Submissive if you know what I mean so let me at least share my feelings for it when I read your writings.


No, what we must have is more Nuance,
Colour is forbidden, only Nuance!
Nuance alone writes the harmonies
Of dream and dream, of woodwind and brass.
There is no theory. You merely have to (listen.) Pleasure is the law.

Thankyou

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot Rene for this colourful review of yours. :)

[Rene Salinas]

Pleasure was all mine , Bows gracefully

[Rene Salinas]

Huh, I htought someone had just messaged me. By the way I am a fan of disjointed thought hence my comments.

[Jack Wolfe]

Short-shorts seem to be a common trend in your work, granted this is only the second I've read, so I shall reserve myself. I fear I must defend the wolf. Your second to last line is great. The only problem I'm seeing is disjointed thoughts (intentional perhaps) "My eyes are lemon drops while I speak to you," a bit of poetic symbolism, but it's quoted, thus, questions the 'While I speak to you,'. I'm a bit tired, and in a bit of beer haze, but it seem contradictory, again, just suggestions, and observations of a buzzed mind.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks tor the review. I appreciate the suggestions. It's pitty that my work is transforming into a sleeping pill but I don't mind. The character was drunk and
I was like always without a concept. The only drive to write was about the corner of past issues and I'm glad that they have been just written down by accident.

[Jack Wolfe]

Not a sleeping pill, sorry, my humor doesn't go over well sometimes. I was jokingly mimicking your main character, seeing as myself was in a beer-haze, no offense meant.

[Sami Khalil]

The visage is whispering tranquility.
" Don't you imitate my pattern, you cannot handle the kink of being in the wrong puzzle."

A splendid read and write. Thank you for joining and posting...:).................

[Jeannette Lunete]

Thanks a lot Sami Khalil . You are welcome. I am glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....................