Curlews

"...What other sound could be like this?

Which other note could trespass on
to where the likes of tears are formed?

What else speaks so well
of wilderness, of loneliness?

Which alternate voice could manifest
this desolate deliverance?

Such trifling things as life and death
are kept in Curlew's calls..."

Reviews

[ghostofdawn]

'What else speaks so well
of wilderness, of loneliness?'

i like the way this builds with the series of questions and the poetry so much everything that is the curlew but visualised with new insight. i just loved the ending. a poem wrapped in gauze with a wonderful sensitivity. i especially liked the second stanza. fantastic.

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thank you kindly.I am sure that you are familiar with Curlews ( I'm partial to a bit of Birding, myself!) I find the calls of some of the moorland and marsh birds extraordinarily ethereal..they really do seem to speak from another world.
I remember, one winter, during heavy snowfall, wall to wall whiteness, the air stilled by the silence of snow...two Curlews called from somewhere high over.
It was a beautiful moment that will always stay with me.

Thank you.

[felioness]

Absolutely awesome. I have one suggestion in the spirit of writer to writer...would you consider dropping the words "on
to " in this line..
Which other note could trespass on
to where the likes of tears are formed?
as:
Which other note could trespass
where the likes of tears are formed?

in my humble opinion the "on to" is redundant to "tresspass" which alludes to being on a place ... whatever ...it is still an absolutely awesome piece!

[Alistair (Ali)]

Thanking you muchly!!..and i do understand where you are coming from here!..the "on to" I had removed once, but I felt that the meter suffered for its loss,..so after some deliberation I popped it back in!..but good constructive analysis is very much appreciated

[Circe]

I found this mesmerising, the sounds that encapsulate the wilderness and the most familiar sound is the call of birds, the echo of the curlew's call resonates deep into the heart of nature and your connection with that holds so much reverence and serenity. you paint the picture of an emotional symphony using the curlew, it was really touching for me.