Melting away

Thought this would turn out to be cool and eerie.

Talking to myself, but is it really me replying?

Seeing these things that aren't really there

A body hanging from a tree

Check again there is nothing

Hear my name yelled out, but no one called it

Thoughts cloud my mind, but they aren't mine

Dreams that are crazy, yet true

Talking but not responding

Hearing a squeak upstairs

Grabbing the knife and tiptoeing

My hand shaking while checking each room

Like I'm in a movie

Forgetting the unforgettable

Remembering unwanted memories

Crying comes so easily, but laughing stays away

Life changing slowly, and no luck at finding the light

Author's Note

Please leave reviews, I always want to know how I can improve my writing!

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Some times things we think aren’t there but we really know they are- life changes but somethings will stay forever- doesn’t have to dark and gloomy it’s actually a blessing that not many understand- believe in yourself and set your mind free- I love it that you are honest and open about what you know to be true- great words🌹

[AllauraRose]

Thanks for your feedback! I agree sometimes thing stay the same for better or for worse, and things change the for those same reasons.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Exactly but the heart knows- follow it🌹

[AllauraRose]

I will do my best to!

[AllenS]

I know this place. This disembodied embodyment. This impatience with the unfolding present. Your play on mind/mine, crazy/true, forgetting/unforgetable, remembering/memories, crying/laughter, help the reader connect with the illusive the stays away beyond the veil of knowing. The will to go from room to room with knife in trembling hand witnesses to a willingness to confront the forboding, and inner bravery and desire to ultimately clear threatening illusion. I really like this poem as it braves confrontation with lifes mirages.

[AllauraRose]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it and understand what I was saying. Life throws things at you sometimes, real or not. Thanks again for the review!

[Sami Khalil]

"Talking but not responding

Hearing a squeak upstairs
Grabbing the knife and tiptoeing
My hand shaking while checking each room
Like I'm in a movie"

Very good and eerie. Keeps you in suspense. Bravo

[AllauraRose]

Thanks, and thank you for the feedback! I always welcome it!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.