In love?

Wrote this a couple years ago, and I thought I should publish it. This isn't true, just my view on love through movies and books and how friend zoning hurts.

You asked me if I have ever been in love

I wasn't sure how to answer

After a while I understood the feeling

The feeling of not caring if you're hurt

Only if they are okay

Living with just being friends

And happy to see them every day

Their eyes, so beautiful and you could stare forever

Thinking about them constantly

Knowing they don't feel the same

Worried they might think you are okay with “just friends”

Trying to be better for them 

You see them on the inside, so on the outside, it reflects

Their inner beauty overpowers the rest

Their laugh is what I live for

Their smile, what I live to see

They see me as me and don't see what I see

They don't care about the skeletons in my closet

Instead, they confess their own

In love?  I can't be, I am still so young

But the heart doesn't lie 

Instead, it makes you feel like you've died

Becuase you're alone and no one compares

To the one you love, no one matches them

You'd rather be alone than to pretend 

So yes, I have been in love

I am in love, but I don't want to be

Author's Note

Feel free to leave feedback! I wrote this a while ago when I was probably in like 7th grade, I had this thing where I wrote about love even though I wasn't in love. Turns out 7th grade me knew more about life then I do now.

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

yes 7th grade i was more in tune with life too and knew myself slightly better than i do now
though i was very innocent in life as we all were back then
i like this its thought provoking and very well written,thanks for entering into my poetry comp good luck

[AllauraRose]

Thank! I'm glad you liked it!

[Raj Sahu]

Nice work.
Thank you.
Congratulations.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Being in love is a rare and special thing most people love eachother but are not in love- being inlove you would do anything for the one you live and sadly if not returned can be a sad and lonely thing I do believe if two people are truly in love that nothing can come between them but then like you say some people live a lie because they are inlove but the partner not- sad life at times but true love will come from both sides- wonderful true words- 🌹

[AllauraRose]

Thank you so much! Yeah, it can be hard but you just have to realize that there is someone out there for you, even if they come later than sooner.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

What is meant to be will be - my pleasure🌹

[C. Lee Battaglia]

They see me as me and don't see what I see
They don't care about the skeletons in my closet
Instead, they confess their own"

Thank you for entering this poem into my contest!
I loved this poem!
It made me feel a part of it and as if I was actually there.
That's what I love about your writing!
You can make the reader feel exactly how you're feeling.
You are a very talented writer/author.
Keep up the amazing work!

Your friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[AllauraRose]

Thank you so much! You are also very talented!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

You're very welcome! Thank you!

[H L Rose]

I think you expressed the sentiment with beautiful aspects, and I like the language you used in the fourth stanza.

“Their laugh is what I live for” was my favorite line, because it expressed the idea clearly and to the point with beautiful language.

In the first stanza the second and third line don’t express the idea in the best way in my opinion. But of course I could be wrong.

Certain lines seem to go a bit long and the stanzas don’t seem to flow into each other the best. But this may just be because there is no structure to the stanzas or lines and I’m not very good at analyzing free verse.

I think you have an interesting sentiment and I really like certain aspects that you included like the thoughts in the second stanza (which is my favorite stanza as a whole).

I enjoyed reading it!

[AllauraRose]

Thanks for your input, I really appreciate it! I will look into in the length of the lines and the first stanza.

[AllauraRose]

I edited it, hope it sounds better! Thanks for the input!

[AllauraRose]

Sorry for replying so much, it said it wasn’t working and I guess it just sent them all.

[H L Rose]

Haha no problem! I do think it’s improved and after a second read I like the sentiment in the fifth stanza too!

[CM-Stars]

That second to last stanza made me cry. I could've written those words and probably have a million different ways in my head.

I love this part:

"You'd rather be alone than to pretend"

Sadly, the heart wants what it wants. So beautiful, good write!!!

[AllauraRose]

I’m sorry you cried, but I’m happy the words related to you. You probably could write abou this same topic and honestly I would love to read your version. Thanks for your feedback!