Poetry Awaits (Apparently)

 

Apparently,

 I thump my thighs

missing a beat

left by my side

in the argument

of confusion...

 

Apparently, 

 I look the fool

aimlessly adrift

forlorn in my

abstract direction

looking for keys…

 

Apparently,

 I’m not the boy

playing baseball

in back my house

the weakest one

doing his best                                                                        

to succeed, not to fail...

 

Apparently,

 I fantasize, still do at 52

‘bout being the best

standing straight

and erect

at five feet five

It’s always been

it always will…

 

Apparently,

 my dormant tracks

came fool circle

with endless

Cheshire cat-like grins

pretending I’m in,

but I’m not...

 

Apparently,

 and eventually

the laughter subsides

and the hurt

hides inside

while the clown reappears

or the drum rat-a-tats

and the pain still remains...

 

Apparently,

 I died a million times

I’ve sailed

the dreaded seas

near and far

upon the ship

taking one last trip...

 

Actually,

 I’ve learned to cope

and deal with the disease

while I live the life

and the hand

I’ve been dealt...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Written: July 25, 2002 (Myrtle Beach, SC)
Photo: Jan 19, 2011 (Key West)

I think this need some revisions...as I reread it....will work on it and repost with some changes..............................i think.

Reviews

[Anne Timmins]

Magnificent word play

[Rouillie Wilkerson]

I think that this is a very coherent piece. It flows and ebbs beautifully. But I'd bet my dessert that you can go deeper than this.

[Tate Morgan]

Congratulations This is a self inward look at the man .I like that .You are a interesting soul of the same generation as I.I suppose you have seen much in your days .The fact that you can see beauty wherever you are is the key to a happy soul.The world needs a few more of you .May you outlive me by a 100 yrs
Tate

[Ken Simm.]

There are gems finely cut in this necklace of a write. Fool circle springs up immediately Well written and heavy with experience.

[Becky C Strukamp]

I think its perfect the way it is...I love the flo and structure! Great work as always Allen. I got caught up in a wave of bewilderment as I read it. Loved it!

[emmajoy]

Smiled through some of the stanzas coz i feel you're laughing at a self still trying to find self! If I'm wrong, sincere apologies. In most of the phrasing you have a distinct meter/metre .. but in some verses you've added a line which actually don't think you need .. HOWEVER ,, tis your post and has so much going for it, some great lines, maybe best to keep it as it is ..

'Apparently,
my dormant tracks
came fool circle
with endless
Cheshire cat-like grins
pretending I’m in,
but I’m not...'

[emmajoy]

Allen, so pleased that you made contact and were/are ok about my brief mention of .. I can see that some of your reviewers disagree with me in a roundabout way .. i feel so guilty now! :)))

[KAREN]

Nicely crafted work!

[Audrey Howitt]

Allen this feels so real---if you revise, be careful not to lose that quality--great write!

[Mockingbird]

excellent poem. it fleshes you out as a poet and a man. it's very romantic and memoir-like. it is also relatable. i really enjoyed it as i do all your work.

[Tamia123]

I love the way you expressed the emotion in this :) Great poem! Keep it up!