Missing Heart

Missing Heart

A Poem by Allen Smuckler
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This is my first attempt in this style (villanelle), thanks to Mark... I hope it works...

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Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

We shared our youth on that first fateful day,

I promise my love I’ll return for your heart.

 

We traveled, tasted, and tried to be smart.

April has passed and cascaded to May.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart

 

Trestled and leaf-like, we dared to restart.

All the good deeds and desires would stay.

I promise my love I’ll return for your heart.

 

Touches and kisses that dare to depart;                                  

will soon be alerted and find their way.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart.

 

Palpable landings and paths will rechart.           

Nothing can act like a miracle play.

I promise my love I’ll return for your heart.

 

Sculpted, molded, and painted fine art;

remembering moments beyond display.

Dreams of embraces are miles apart

I promise my love I’ll return for your heart.

 

 

 

 



© 2013 Allen Smuckler



Author's Note

Allen Smuckler
April 29, 2013
Photo: Siesta Key, Sarasota (January 20, 2013

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Beautiful photo and poetry. You gave the poem the feel of love and left the reader with promises. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
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Posted 3 Years Ago


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Dye
I really enjoyed the flow and the rhyme of this...along with that longing for romance feel......and the emotion behind it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Awesome. Beautiful in its reminsicing. Conveys all the love and romance. A wonderful poem to read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Romantic , passionate , nostalgic and splendid in all aspects ...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Oh this is sweet Allen .Love knows no boundary and neither do the romantics among us. I finally finished reading your book I had gotten tied up on a few things before.It was great a true treasure to leave to your own.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Your lines flow so easily and the rhyme is flawless. The romantic longing is intense throughout. Well written emotional villanelle. Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


"We traveled, tasted, and tried to be smart.
April has passed and cascaded to May.
Dreams of embraces are miles apart"

beautiful melancholy piece Allen... shallimarRose

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is well versed... the strict form and the adhesion... flow is not hindered and the sound of song comes through... The long journey and the promise of return... and the undying love...

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is really touching; in a very skillful way you show the innocence and the pain and the hesitancy of love. Villanelle is a very hard form to work with, and it usually turns out to be crude and forced, but your poem flows well and emanataes with good feelings. Great work!

Posted 4 Years Ago


The rhyme & rhythm oozing with emotions,is so comforting...it calls for so much of warmth & security..this was a new form for me & I enjoyed it thoroughly..

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Allen Smuckler
Allen Smuckler

Sarasota, FL



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I'm a poet, a singer, a peaceful gunslinger.. looking to share my poetry..and a little bit of me...if I dare I 've been writing since I was 18.... am slightly older now, and still trying to fin.. more..

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