plasty is nasty

plasty is nasty

A Poem by Allen Smuckler
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Been away a few days...this is why. It's all about seeing the light, folks.

"


thumping, pumping the ache and pain

was never right had nothing to gain

 

prowling, growling  robbed of  all strength

something amiss within arm’s length

 

knowing, growing learn from mistakes

trod with great effort all that it takes

 

finding, blinding white heat in my chest

look for some refuge a place to rest

 

frightening, heightening, fears abound

await the cold needle and caustic sound

 

swishing, wishing all I could stand

never felt much while in la-la land

 

ballooning, tuning as probe trisects

the team finds a way and resurrects

 

plasty is nasty I’m sure you’ll agree

but dawn’s early light is all I can see…

 

 

 


 


© 2013 Allen Smuckler



Author's Note

Allen Smuckler
May 7, 2013
photo: what a stent looks like

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As an owner of two bypass operations and three stents, I identified with this poem immediately. I wouldn't change a single word. Great internal rhymes, tight syntax, fast moving. Love it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


my cousin has them, my mom has them...not fun...really terrific poem here, the alliteration makes us hear and feel the heart pumping...and thumping...

nicely done, Allen

Posted 3 Years Ago


This has an intensity in which I can literally hear the thumping of your heart... The anxiety of the pain....

A dose of reality, my friend!... I felt it!~xoxo~

Posted 4 Years Ago


I really liked the repetitive words in each stanza. Gives a sense of a rush, a suddenly too high. At least it seems like an overdose experience to me. From an outsider looking in. Very nice. A good fast past tempo with a short stanza to keep the breath racing to keep up in pace. Yet another beautiful peace.

I like to try and make small suggestions in most of my reviews. Some poems I don't think need them, my other review didn't have one, but the only thing I see in this, and I don't know if you do this for every rhyme you write, but rhymes don't have to be exact. Rhymes are relative. It's just to aide the flow of the poem, nothing more.

Vey nice,
M. Super

Posted 4 Years Ago


nice................................

Posted 4 Years Ago


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lei
wow the rhyming and sorry for the pain you've been through.

Posted 4 Years Ago


My husband went through this six years ago, and I am just happy that nasty plasty worked so well! At least you and he are still here to appreciate it. This poem is great - loved the cadence and the rhyme. Very effective.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I will say I commend you for the efforts of this write... One can't just put this on black and white without going through the experience... To life and many more days to come...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow so sorry to hear sweetheart.. My friend had this done last year but I had no idea what it was.. It is better to live with it then die without it? Cute rhyme.. xo shallimarRose

Posted 4 Years Ago


like a rap, grand master A

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Allen Smuckler
Allen Smuckler

Sarasota, FL



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I'm a poet, a singer, a peaceful gunslinger.. looking to share my poetry..and a little bit of me...if I dare I 've been writing since I was 18.... am slightly older now, and still trying to fin.. more..

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