You in Me

When we Fall in Love, boundaries we have used to define our lives and relationships, become porus for a time. We begin to ask identity questions once again.

What is this YOU that is not me,
This ME that does not see you?

What is this need I have to differentiate,
To see the straight between to continents,
To feel the space between our reaching arms.

What is there in me that finds itself in separation
Delineation
Demarcation

It is as though I need to know the "not I"
Before I know the "I"
I seek

Strange notion
Strange need
Strange nectar to feed
The god of being.

Where are the toughting Cistene fingertips?
Where is finding myself in you,
Knowing self in your reflection?

What if that is the only ME that exists?

Author's Note

Please give me straight feedback. This is the only way I grow. Some reviewers have questioned the use of such intimate material. Others have questioned if this is rightly a poem. Others have been turned off by Sealon Renkes fantastic shower curtin sillouette depicts deep questions

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

If two become one truly one there will be nomore questions and wondering there will just be and the two as one in spirit and soul- that merging together just knows that it’s found home- the attraction will be there the connection to know but once felt then nomore questions will be asked- wonderful words amazingly different set out I love how you have done this🌹

[AllenS]

I agree about the instinctive heart of a truly loving relationship. I see how there is a bit of fear echoed in this peace. The fear of loss. May have been the particular time. Thanks for the testimonial and reminder that there is nothing to fear.

[Tian]

I really like the imagery you used throughout this poem, and I especially like your first stanza, as it is quite thought provoking :)

[Govind singh]

I can relate that...lovely written sir...even the image is so relatable..loved it

[Davidgeo]

The poem's fine... anything can be poetry. Whomever questioned that should not seriously be considered.

But your presentation is almost insidious in regards to the far sighted. Is it really necessary for the text to be that small? The writing does not significantly benefit from that presentation, it detracts from it if anything. Just let your words speak for themselves... the gimmicky presentation crap just makes you seem like an insecure try hard.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Love this thought-provoking, cleverly and beautifully written poem...unique form, structure, imagery...analytical style in the asking of salient, intimate questions about the nature of love in relation to ‘self’, creative font and spacing of letters to illustrate content..lovely, lyrical language, organic flow and cadence. A partly rhetorical, partly musing and contemplative piece. Beautiful.

[Kelly Scheppers]

There is a cohesiveness to your words and the image you've applied. Intellectually, I found it quite invigorating to read, even though the font perhaps could have been a touch bigger and darker. Falling in love is certainly an enigma, and that is the synopsis of what I walked away with, here.

Great presentation, Allen!