sonny in the rain

 

  breast's bumps of green ground
   the earth’s new scum
buried beneath
   while the sky cums on us
pleasured pearls of ice
   on shuddered flesh
we embraced; on
   the moors like children ;
   like scarecrows born
   in fields of corn
her hair was like a
    wildflowers’ grace
    wet with a river’s pace and stroke
as i gnawed her scent
like a wolf in sheep’s cotton
    oh, little sonny
    don’t you know not to cry wolf
    in moors so bare to an ear
your mistake fed our day
    the fair is no place for a    dear
                  the world is certainly a place for the unfurled
even these fires
do not die in rains so worthy of soak

Reviews

[Michael G.]

Another interesting write. I liked this one.
Are you spreading your wings in a different direction lately? Or am I just seeing a more, for lack of better word, a more "mature" Aplris? One who isn't afraid to try new ways to get her thoughts through to us.

[Alpris]

Thank you, Michael :) I'm using certain things as inspiration and I guess this is what I produce. I thank you for your kind words on my work + taking the time to read. I'm also glad you find it a mature write :)

[Clockwork]

I can see what Michael means. I think your style is quite a bit more refined. Your poetry has a new shape and texture and I see new images mixed in with your classics. I am glad to read you again!

[Alpris]

Thank you Christian! what a lovely review :) I've missed you.

[Clockwork]

Your welcome. I've missed you too

[Melobldnfr]

"the fair is no place for a dear" I think I may appreciate this part the most. Also, "as I gnawed her scent like a wolf in sheep's cotton" Very visual, sensual, and earthy. I can almost smell it.

[Alpris]

Thank you dear, what kind words!

[cilla]

Well, you changed the ending before I had time to comment ... rats!!! I had a good friend in school named Sonny and what a sweet thing she was. Fodder for the big, bad wolf? Your writing has certainly taken some bold and interesting steps ... leaving the rest of us to contemplate "what?"

I think I liked the first version better but know you must of had good reason for the change. Those fires you started will burn eternally but that is what you wanted all along ... right? Nice work once again.

[Alpris]

Thank you very much for your kind and helpful review, Cilla :)
I did change it for good reason, yes. People were beginning to focus on the erotic side too much whilst ignoring the hidden meaning; hence the add of "unfurled". The fire defines much more than that of heated passion of love.. Damn right an eternal fire is what I want ;) Thank you once again, sweetie

[Hester Vane]

An unexpected piece. Quite sexy but subtle! Well done!

[MoriartyMesa]

I aint old enough to read this with out asking mother. LOL, this was well, a lot like seeing The Who in 1978 tripping acid (wasnt there but Ma was) you didnt just hit the nail on the head, YOU CAME ON IT!!!!

[Crazy Cat Man]

a lovely nice romantic sensual piece :) i was aroused very much. good job.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Beautiful, only a real talent can create such a great link amoung two people and the nature surrounding them and make it so gracious and deep :)