A journey I took long ago

A journey I took long ago

A Poem by 李[A]
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Felt like writing a lot of poetry today. Thought about the interesting struggle of fate. Well here you go!

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Twenty years ago I looked at myself
Through a mirror that told me of my future.
The mirror told me of dark stories,
Misadventures, horrifying odysseys alike.
Yet, no matter what I saw, I saw no illumination.


I absconded from the scene
Of the crime;
The mirror to curse me forever had sealed my fate.
There would be no running, for I, just like Oedipus Rex,
had been accursed by the Fates.


I took the path of indecision: what more could
I do?
A paucity of hope was left
In the dearth of my emotion. Yet, one day,


A cloud appeared differently: an illusion to my eyes.
What originated as rain, transformed into drops of
Growth,
As the life around me polymerized into sunlight.

Whether I had been deceived by greater forces,
Or whether one had heard my calls, the boon was granted.


© 2011 李[A]



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李[A]
All criticism appreciated!

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Oh wow this is really meaninginful! The ability to pick your head up and keep going through the dark tunnel always leads to the light at the end! This has a very powerful meaning behind it! People usually give up and say "f**k it" but the strongest people will go headstrong against the worst times and rise above it, coming out victorious!

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very, very meaningful and inspirational. i love it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this... and i love these lines especially:
"A cloud appeared differently: an illusion to my eyes.
What originated as rain, transformed "
... creative... really nice.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh wow this is really meaninginful! The ability to pick your head up and keep going through the dark tunnel always leads to the light at the end! This has a very powerful meaning behind it! People usually give up and say "f**k it" but the strongest people will go headstrong against the worst times and rise above it, coming out victorious!

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I love this! Amazing write keep up your awesome work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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I really love this piece. I personally don't believe in fate, but the question of fate is always fun to ponder. Do our futures make us, or do we actually have a choice in making our future?

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Rae
I absolutly love this poem. It reminds me a lot of Edgar Allan Poe. Keep writing!!

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Added on July 23, 2011
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Tags: Journey, Odyssey, fate, mirror, future, past, clouds, sun

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李[A]

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Hey! I'm A. (figure out the rest of the letters :P). Anyways, I'm a sixteen year old boy who normally doesn't write that much, but hey, I'm practicing vocabulary and writing skills at once so why not .. more..

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