Bridging The Gap

 

The holly light a candle

The poet writes a verse

The sleepers dream a dream

And the beggars spit and curse

To feed the yearning hunger, that spreads within their lives,

To bridge the gap between them, and their gods

 

The surfer rides a wave

The raven rides the winds

The singer hums a tune

And the breeze rustles the leaves

To fill the endless hole, that is drilled into their hearts

To bridge the gap between them, and their gods

 

The man holds a woman,

The women hold the children

The demons light a fire

The painter strokes the canvas,

To see the angels dancing, with their eyes and in their hearts

To bridge the gap between them, and their gods

 

 

 

Reviews

[praying for help]

i really like this one. it seems to me to be saying that we create our own gods with the sheer force of our desires, and the gap only remains when we cease being creative in and of ourselves. but that's just me.

i am finding your poems compelling tonight. and i hope you do not mind the intrusion. i apologize, if this is the case.

[Dianah]

Oh, I do love this, the flow the subject, the repitition of the last line in each stanza. One of my favourites by you.

[QuietPoet]

Very nice. It had great flow and I pictured it in my head. Nicely done

My favorite lines were:

The surfer rides a wave
The raven rides the winds
The singer hums a tune
And the breeze rustles the leaves
To fill the endless hole, that is drilled into their hearts
To bridge the gap between them, and their gods

Very deep and beautiful. Loved it

[Emily B]

I believe the gaps must be getting smaller . . . that our gods are become the one that they always were. It is a stunning write. The rhythm of it matched my day.

[Liza]

I enjoyed this. Interesting how you slowed down and saw the big picture of the actions we each take to bridge the gap with our Gods.

[Sorry Infamous]

"The painter strokes the canvas"- For some reason I love this line. Very visual.

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this write quite profound and deep really

And yes it's true
The demons light a fire
They as well feed the fire
We all help feed that fire when we sin!

I like this. Very thought provoking indeed!
Well written.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

this is a very profound piece.. i love that rhythmic pulse you use here - almost like metered steps in a line.. you could almost say your write is ritualistic in form..

[Ferg]

This is a thought-provoking piece. I like the structure and progression of the piece and the repetition at the end of each verse. You bring up multiple dynamics of the interplay between Creation and God. Well written.

[R J Askew]

Is that what we do? When we get it right. It seems like a good thing to do and a good way to be. I like the notion of the beggars spitting and cursing. And I can see the surfer...on a rhyming wave, his board perhaps a line he has just written and wants to check out on the wave.