Wasted chances

 

 

In the cold and damp of your twisted brain,

You are exiled, cause you’ve gone insane,

The little cave inside your head,

Echoes all you’ve done and said,

Bouncing of the padded walls, are ghouls and ghosts,

But what scares you most,

Are the wasted chances, and the dark thoughts

That always keep you down.

Reviews

[Frances O'Neill]

Deep lingering reflections, with a quick tempo.

[deeps]

I like this it is very well written

[Tina Kline]

A problem most of suffer from. The tortured thoughts of wasted chances. A harsh poem but I think nicely done, it gets the point across how these thoughts torment us.

[cest la vie]

We say hindsight is 20-20. So many times we let opportunity pass us right on by, don't take that chance.. Powerful message in this piece. Nicely done!

[Sorry Infamous]

I really liked this. The beginning was such a powerful force. I couldn't stop reading...

[peacefrog]

the thing that worries me the most is wasting a chance.

its hard to live life and not waste any.

[April Child]

Brilliant, the mind as a dark scary cave with the voices echoing around in it. It can feel a bit like that sometimes with that voice, you know the one, we all have it, the one that keeps us down, down, down or is that just me, oh dear, am I insane?

[QuietPoet]

Wow, really deep write. I felt the emotion in this. Nicely done.

[BLACKCRUSH]

I thought this was really good , the mind can be the scary twisted place.In this piece your descriptions of the characters state of mind were brilliant.Another wonderful piece.