Limbo

Limbo

A Poem by The Flawed

 

When I try to do good, I always burn,
I guess some lessons, I’ll never learn,
Is my mind playing tricks on me, or am I too late?
When did all the love turn into hate?
 
I’ve danced with the devil I’ve kissed angels too,
I’ve drunk from the moonlit stream in the forest of truth,
I hugged the sun, where the oceans were blue.
But now I’m fighting demons in a darkness that’s new,
They say I’ve missed my ride; I refuse to think that this is true.
 
Lost in between thoughts and dreams,
I know what I saw, but I don’t know what it means,
Where sanity dies and madness is not yet born,
Where no one wants to take and no one wants to control.
 
My eyes were closed, though I think I was awake,
I was floating in the skies, or was it a lake?
There was a dance of light and birds with silver wings,
A slight breeze in the air,
And fish in all shades of pink.
 
Lost in between thoughts and dreams,
I know what I saw, but I don’t know what it means,
My conscience was clear, but my soul was sad,
It seemed all good, but I felt real bad.
 
When I feel like this, I want to leave the race,
I guess some souls will never rest.

© 2010 The Flawed



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a very powerful piece .. the imagery in this was very stunning... overall very nicely done... fav lines..I've danced with the devil I've kissed angels too,I've drunk from the moonlit stream in the forest of truth,I hugged the sun, where the oceans were blue.But now I'm fighting demons in a darkness that's new,They say I've missed my ride; I refuse to think that this is true.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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This is both very personal and a snapshot of the human condition - the frustration as we try to find our paths and ourselves. You express the turmoil of the heart so well, no matter the specific catalyst, we probably all feel something similar at some time. Absolutely beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Criag I apprecaite the spiritual concept..thank you

Posted 7 Years Ago


A amazing poem. The battle to gain understanding of this world. I like the feeling of the struggle and disappointments of life. Your ending was perfect. We must never rest. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

congrats on your winning poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow... Some souls will never rest...unique
Powerful... the flow is a masterpiece...
the unique style of every word you choose to laid here
is like a novel
so well picked...x0x0x0x

Posted 7 Years Ago


Seems to me you're just a very human being .. done it all or most of it, realise it now and again, look back and see the follies, not sure if you can live down your own past ..

limbo is a nothing place to be, neither here or there.. maybe if the mind and heart realises that living life is what makes us tick as real people with real feelings .. we could accept the past .. and just live day by day ..

And you know that's it true here: 'They say I've missed my ride; I refuse to think that this is true.'

Intriguing write .. will come back to it again .. maybe i've not read between the lines.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I've danced with the devil I've kissed angels too,
I've drunk from the moonlit stream in the forest of truth,
I hugged the sun, where the oceans were blue.
But now I'm fighting demons in a darkness that's new,
They say I've missed my ride; I refuse to think that this is true

i so adore this stanza.. the images just hold my attention and make me want to paint

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this because for once a poem struck the right balance between being lyrically cryptic and beautiful and also having a meaning that somewhere deep down (in my fuzzy little brain!) I understood. It was very very lovely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I've danced with the devil I've kissed angels too,I've drunk from the moonlit stream in the forest of truth,
I really enjoyed this.... and thought that line wonderful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Too awesome. I really really liked this piece. "when I try do good, I always burn", for me and several people I know, this line is so true! I thought how you ended the poem off with the lines "when I feel like this, I want to leave the race/ I guess some souls will never rest" was perfectly done. Nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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