That Morning Cup of Tea

That Morning Cup of Tea

A Poem by Arielle Ann

 

Today in the wee hours of the morning,

As I let the drapes apart,

Perched by the window sill,

As I let the first rays peep in,

Squinted to the radiance while,

I hugged a fuming cup of tea.

 

I mutely curled and gaped,

At the hazy steam puffing my eyes,

A thin skin of milk has emerged,

Often swaying to the draught drafting in.

It shrivels and shakes, twists and turns,

Seeks escape, from the ruthless heat creeping in.

But I see the heat slowly fading,

In the vapors with the breeze,

Yet you lie wasted, still you can’t flee,

And I laugh at you, a mirthless glee!

 

Indeed so much was said,

Today, in that morning cup of tea!

© 2011 Arielle Ann


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I adored this... it really has that grandiose english cafe feel when you picture two ole blokes having a cup of tea together. Also, +1 for tying in accentual vocabulary into your poem. It's usually a thing writers try to avoid doing because it's not easy to integrate into one's writing without coming off as "cliche" or "lame", frankly though I think it gives your writing somewhat of a cute aspect in the way you used it here with words like "wee"... perhaps the downside of it was the cut back. When using accents, you can't really overdo it, but you shouldn't under-do it either. So feel free to be open with them more often when it comes to writing poetry, just don't get carried away with it.
One thing constructive to say is that remember to try and blend in techniques into your writing too, or something overall to make the poem flow together. You have an effective way of creating lines, but you don't seem to tie them together with anything... try stuff like consonance, assonance, rhyme schemes, end rhyme, syllable counts, etc. Writing is much about technique as is creativity
Overall, really adored the poem. Think it's a 95/100 I say. good work, keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Well, I'm more of a coffee person and I hate tea, haha, but still, I think you described the moment perfectly. From the smallest details to the biggest, you used beautiful words to express everything well. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I adored this... it really has that grandiose english cafe feel when you picture two ole blokes having a cup of tea together. Also, +1 for tying in accentual vocabulary into your poem. It's usually a thing writers try to avoid doing because it's not easy to integrate into one's writing without coming off as "cliche" or "lame", frankly though I think it gives your writing somewhat of a cute aspect in the way you used it here with words like "wee"... perhaps the downside of it was the cut back. When using accents, you can't really overdo it, but you shouldn't under-do it either. So feel free to be open with them more often when it comes to writing poetry, just don't get carried away with it.
One thing constructive to say is that remember to try and blend in techniques into your writing too, or something overall to make the poem flow together. You have an effective way of creating lines, but you don't seem to tie them together with anything... try stuff like consonance, assonance, rhyme schemes, end rhyme, syllable counts, etc. Writing is much about technique as is creativity
Overall, really adored the poem. Think it's a 95/100 I say. good work, keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very great write :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


You are a magician who can trap the moments into exemplary poetic fabric to mesmerize the readers. Mindblowing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I would have never guessed such words could come out of a cup of tea. Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well illustrated the moment! It's beautiful, you saw and felt! Concentrating on daily things, is something unique we do! Well, but I hate that thin skin of milk emerging on my tea :P Keep on the great work! Love and Light!

Posted 12 Years Ago


i really liked it! haha i love tea, and the was you descdribed it made me want some, it was great detail, and really made the simple drink tea, more thsn that, instead of it just being a good drink it was a beautiful morning c:

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Arielle Ann
Arielle Ann

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