A Lost Breath

A Lost Breath

A Chapter by Closed
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she was a baby's breath 
                                      a    w h i s p e r                                      
    that passed between hearts
   leaving gentle words                          
         that never formed a sentence
but left us dazzled                    
 by her presence      

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So beautifully penned, from such sorrow.

Posted 8 Months Ago


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8 Months Ago

Thank you Nemo.
Lorry.

8 Months Ago

You're welcome.
This is very breathtaking. Your ability to take something sad & mold it into a beautiful shape still continues to astound me.

Posted 11 Months Ago


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11 Months Ago

Thank you, I really appreciate that.
PhoenixDown

11 Months Ago

You're most welcome A.
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Soft, sad and beautiful ! It was small but powerful! Thank you for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Bev, thank you for the nice comment.
I'm not joking when I say that these are the saddest lines I've ever read. So well expressed. So many things pass through my mind when I read these, so many different scenarios where these words apply. For the writer, i know it can only be one, but for the reader it's so many more.

A very special write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

It's a sad poem for me too. Thank you James. I appreciate your visits always.
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This is devastatingly beautiful. Some memories are like that...life long.
Stunning poetry, memorable! Starz

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Hardly, but thanks. :)
I was away...
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1 Year Ago

well its good to see those chucks...you were missed Papaya :)
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1 Year Ago

Thanks Starz. :)
There are those precious memories, people, places -- a breath, we never forget, beautifully articulated in this short piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Thanks so much K.
Perfection in so few words. R xo

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Thank you Rachel, very much.
It is akin to seeing a newborn and the vitality of fresh eyes. Bravo Ana!

Regards,

Al

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Thanks Al, really appreciate the comment.
I love the imagery that this produced in me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Hi Jackie L. Thank you very much for your comment.

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