a mango undressed

a mango undressed

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i. 

sheathed 
in a thick skin
she shelters the fleshy softness
that lies within 

ii. 

nectar 
sweet as sin, it seeps 
teasing the tongue 
while a heart of stone weeps 

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Sky
while a heart of stone weeps, a mango undressed and apple is watching silently. How come? Maybe she shelters the fleshy softness
that lies within

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1 Year Ago

Oh, I just noticed you changed your name! :)
Thanks Sky! I always appreciate your comments!
Sky

1 Year Ago

lol yes I thought sky is better and small rather than skyfall. Also it's pleasure reading your poems.. read more
ahhhh, so beautiful, so tragic.So much said beyond the confines such a short piece should have. You, and your words have been missed. :)

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1 Year Ago

Thanks Nemo, you and your words have been missed too. :)
Lorry.

1 Year Ago

Yours have been missed three and four and five :)
we do do this don't we, try and protect our hearts from hurts and loss... we harden our hearts, show only the strong exterior, and yet often who we really are (that sweet nectar of ourselves), still reveals itself only to be fooled again... it hurts to be treated badly, and often by someone who is supposed to "love" us or professes too...

it's a sad poem Ana, one I will read many times... and I must also say, I have missed reading your poetry and glad you posted these few today... I surely hope everything is good with you....

redzone

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1 Year Ago

Thanks so much red. I'm doing well. :)
redzone

1 Year Ago

okay, good... now I am happy... YEAH ANA!!!!
Amazing use of words. Create powerful emotions and deep place. Use of the mango made the words come alive to the reader. Thank you dear friend for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

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1 Year Ago

Really appreciate you spending time reading my poems today Coyote. Thanks!
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I love your work and you are welcome my friend.
I shall now give the mango total respect from now on.
Though the mango may be hiding something deeper.



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1 Year Ago

lol. yes, possible something deeper.
thanks so much paul for reading and commenting!
so human....so much like us.

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1 Year Ago

hi jacob, thank you so much!!
what a delicious tragedy ... poor poor stone hearted Mango! i will now forever weep in my ecstasy eating ... perhaps if i only go so far i can avoid the pitfalls ;) of a cold heart .. great fun read for me my good friend
E.

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1 Year Ago

Hi there E! Thank you kindly for your lovely comment. :)
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Mangoes just got more delicious! Scriabin...wonderful composer, I've painted many modules to his epic pieces! Maybe I'll paint mangoes sometime :) Starz

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1 Year Ago

Thank you. His pieces are gorgeous. I didn't know that you paint. I'd love to see some of your wo.. read more
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1 Year Ago

I posted some random modules here some people asked to see some of my work.
Closed

1 Year Ago

Definitely will have a look!
I think it's perfect. We learn to protect ourselves but sometimes we just have to let some feelings out.

Good to see you. It's been awhile.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Good to see you too! Thanks for popping in on me! :)
This isn't finished. Or at least it doesn't feel finished to me.

You should make it much longer. It has a good structure that is repeatable. Make it longer with a linear thread.

"fleshy softness"
----
"stone weeps"
That was a brilliant play. Outstanding.

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1 Year Ago

Thank you for the suggestion. When you say linear thread what exactly do you mean? The structure?.. read more
Lestat American

1 Year Ago

The structure. A good structure can make a whole bunch of themes work in concert and maybe even reve.. read more

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