my jealous heart

my jealous heart

A Chapter by Closed
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my jealous heart 

shies away from the sun

where lovers walk together

in open display

while my love lies

packed away

(not hidden)

if you look carefully  

you will find

a smile, a word

a look that searches your own

for something

enough to reveal

that you love me 


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© 2016 Closed



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To be the one who notices others and sees them for what they truly are, flaws and all, can seem like a lonely place to be, but it is quality, not quantity that will let that other person see us for what we truly are and maybe that shared moment will spark more to follow.
Beautifully penned Ana. I especially love the line "a look that searches your own", that's what it is all about and what we all would like to see.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorry.

12 Months Ago

Good vibage? I like that. Tell Santa that if you see him :)
Closed

12 Months Ago

I will for sure!
Lorry.

12 Months Ago

Thanks. I sent him an e mail to tell him how good you've been too. :)



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Makes me think of all the potential lovers who could be walking together, too. The problem isn't so much people not speaking up enough. The problem is usually more people not listening or seeing...

Lovely. Top notch work/expression.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Closed

10 Months Ago

Yeah, that's true too, for sure! Thanks again P!
Beautiful graceful pen babe! Nemo kinda expressed my feelings about this. R xo

Posted 10 Months Ago


Closed

10 Months Ago

Thanks Rach, yeah... He's a wise guy that Nemo. :)
Thanks for reading this!
aLittlePain

10 Months Ago

All good yo!
Scanning for the spark that lights the way into another heart is a time-consuming and seemingly fruitless task but on we go, forever scanning and all the while the world carries on - oblivious to our limbo state.
I like that jealousy isnt envy here and that hope reigns supreme in the looking.
:))

Posted 10 Months Ago


Closed

10 Months Ago

Thank you Tony, hope reigns supreme!
Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

It does that Ana, it does that...
It's my pleasure to review your work.
:)

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Closed

10 Months Ago

read more?
I'm guessing there's nothing more though?
don't know why it does that...
The balance of love. Should we do or should we not.
"a smile, a word
a look that searches your own
for something
enough to reveal"
I did like the above lines. I believe we fear love more than we should. Love should be a fearless journey. Old age make every love a worthwhile dance. Thank you Ana for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote
that you love me




Posted 11 Months Ago


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11 Months Ago

Thanks for the great comment!
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Ana.
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Sky
a look that searches your own
for something
enough to reveal
that you love me

Those lines are beautiful. Ahh they are.

Posted 12 Months Ago


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12 Months Ago

Thank you so much Skyfall! :)
Sky

12 Months Ago

Welcome Ana as always you're ;)
ah Papaya, so tender a touch with a longing to find an equal touch from someone, a returned smile and seeing the feeling is also shared... kinda like a song for a lost chord... and for what it is worth, a ;0)..

an amazing poem Ana...

redzone

Posted 12 Months Ago


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12 Months Ago

a lost chord... I like that. Thanks red!!
Closed

12 Months Ago

a lost chord... I like that. Thanks red!!
To be the one who notices others and sees them for what they truly are, flaws and all, can seem like a lonely place to be, but it is quality, not quantity that will let that other person see us for what we truly are and maybe that shared moment will spark more to follow.
Beautifully penned Ana. I especially love the line "a look that searches your own", that's what it is all about and what we all would like to see.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorry.

12 Months Ago

Good vibage? I like that. Tell Santa that if you see him :)
Closed

12 Months Ago

I will for sure!
Lorry.

12 Months Ago

Thanks. I sent him an e mail to tell him how good you've been too. :)
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Really lovely but sad. Like missing/longing/waiting...
Its Saturday morning here, so I wish you a lovely weekend Ana : ) Starz x

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Have a good one Starz! And thanks!
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1 Year Ago

Thank you, almost 5am not long home from work...dreamland soon.
Closed

1 Year Ago

sweet dreams...
There is a deep sadness to this one, Ana. When someone is looking for love, it is painful to see others holding hands, laughing, and enjoying life. You hope someone will love you again....the way you should be loved. The emotions expressed here are so real. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


Closed

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lydi. :)
This was nice, a little sad, too. Not a love poem, not a heartbreak poem, just a waiting and a longing poem. Something a little different today.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Closed

1 Year Ago

thank you so much James. :)

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