WHAT AM I?: Nephilim WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
A teen boy gets killed, but trades his soul for another chance. He changes. A girl notices the new boy with silver eyes.
comet

comet

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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it came to life and 
  sizzled for a moment
like a birthday sparkler
         a moment of magic
that was over 
   before we even knew it was there
its light extinguished
     but the heat is still there

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© 2017 Ana Papaya



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Love can be like a comet. So powerful and fall apart like a dying star. Amazing use of words dear Ana.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


Ana Papaya

1 Month Ago

thx a bunch coyote!
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

You are welcome Ana. I will return tomorrow. Off to work.
isnt this the truth. working in kitchens long enough has taught me to assume all pans are hot. Even if they are not glowing red.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

That's a good thing to assume. I've been burned once or twice. Thanks Cory. :)
.. but the heat is still there '

Wish i could write such sweet rich brevity, leave a picture in another person's mind, as you've done to mine. Your words an' my thoughts combine to leave a snapshot of something uitterly magical that leaves its special mark.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

thanks so much emma, i appreciate you so much :)
emmajoy

2 Months Ago

Reciprocated, dear you!
There's a reason it's called a flame. There's passion for a brief moment, but after that's gone, what's left? I like the analogies here ("sparkler", "light extinguished").

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

Hi Clifford, great to see you and thank you for the comment. So glad you liked it. :)
such glory we watch in a comet is so quickly gone as your poem says .. and with it tho the event is over .. we stand staring in awe for much longer .. lost in gazing .. but gained in spirit ;) love your poem .. it moves me Ana ..its innocence and simplicity of language belie the depth
E.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

Hey Mr E. :)
Thank you for always dropping by to leave comments that make me smile.
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

you are so welcome..thanks for being here ;)
Oh I have many moments that will forever burn in my mind. Like how you used birthday candles as the analogy, it is like saying life moves fast and we age quickly.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

yes, it does move way too fast :)
thanks again, i always appreciate your comments!
Memories afterglow, like natures way of saying "is that it?" It can make beautiful memories, so why does it so often choose "Meh."
I should really just copy and paste how much you fit into so few words. I'm starting to sound like a parrot :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

It's ok. I like parrots. Thank a bunch Lorry!
Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

*Thanks sssssssssssssssssssss
Lorry.

2 Months Ago

Welcome :)
This poem feels like the companion poem for the one I wrote just this morning (Gunslinger) . . . despite my disappointing encounter, there's always a twizzle sparkling still . . . *wink! wink!* Your poem is nicely suggestive & true-to-human-nature! (((HUGS)))

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

gunslinger - i like the title you chose. :)
will definitely pop over to read and thank you f.. read more
This made me think of someone from a long time ago.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

old flame? :)
James

2 Months Ago

Real old flame, now just an old friend.
Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

yeah, mine is heading in that direction too i think
:)

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