Alive

The wind in my hair

And the grass beneath my feet

Tell me I'm alive.

Reviews

[Justin Wilson]

This is a wonderful piece of work. It is very expressive and it really captures the essence of life. It takes great skill to construct a quality haiku because you have to capture everything in very few words, but you did just that. Keep it up and I look forward to reading more of your writing!

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you very much for reading and for the kind words, Justin!

[Richard Mueller]

Haven't seen a haiku in a while. Certainly haven't written one in a while as well! Simple, sweet, short, too the point. Wind, a lovely breeze so delicate, but intricate and the grass, a texture most soft, loving, and nurturing unto one's feet. The simple nouns provide an imagery that one might associate with reality which is exactly what I was looking for in my contest. While it's short, I'd say that your poem has a fair chance among the rest of the submissions. I love it! Great job!

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you very much, Richard! I'm glad you like it!

[Sarah]

Just simple natural elements can be so telling. Beautiful haiku!

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you very much, Sarah!

[Sargon Dorsai]

I would love to see this a piece of art. A haiku like this deserves to be crafted into a work of art. Perhaps someone with long hair sitting on a hill. The picture zoomed in on them, strands of hair blowing gently in the wind, barefoot with a sunhat.

[Anastasia_Snow]

Yes! That would be really cool! The picture you described would fit this haiku perfectly, I think.

[Robert Haigh]

Simple, but satisfying! Sometimes less is more.

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you very much!