Too Good.

I really like this one, and it is something i wrote as it happened. its been almost a year now, and it still is the best i have right now.

Soft grey jeans, skin tight.

Bleached blonde hair, like sunlight.

Gentle hands hold me close,

But its those piercing blue eyes 

I love the most.

A quick glance towards him

Breathtaking to behold.

Butterflies go through me,

My hands are growing cold.

For who am I to him?

He, who words can't even explain.

A shining light to bring the sunshine

And stop the endlessly pouring rain.

But now i have to look away

My longing gaze he cannot see.

If only he would've looked this way,

And seen my longing, desperate plea.

But he's far too good for someone like me.

Reviews

[Dexter]

Hm. I don't know how I exactly feel about this poem. I need to increase my vocabulary to understand what some of the words mean in this poem and how you used them exactly. However, near the ending i gathered you were fancying a guy, and he was beautiful, and you wanted him to acknowledge that, but at the same time you felt he was too good for you.

[Moonrose]

Aaw I love this! This is great, really, I didn't know you could write so well. Thank you for sharing this... I love your phrases and descriptions; it makes me feel with you, and I'm sorry you have to feel the pains of unrequited love. More like you're too good for him ;) I'm just kidding, but great job, I can't wait to read more! :)

[RedInk524]

Very good poem. A perfect description of the common crush that plagues our youth. Lol, it brings back silly memories... I like the rhyme and pattern along with the detail. Keep up the good work.