Twisted

Twisted

A Story by Andronicus
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It was a hot sunny weekend in January when the bodies started to wash ashore. Jayne gave out a stifled exclamation when she saw the first.


"No! Buddy! Back off!" She yelled at her dog as he sniffed and pawed.


Shading her eyes, she looked up and down the deserted beach as though expecting someone to appear but of course nobody did. She and Buddy were the only inhabitants of the island. That's if you didn't count the rabbits that pilfered the vegetable patch no matter how many traps Jayne lay.


The mainlanders thought isolation had turned Jayne mad. Maybe they were right, thought Jayne as she leaned down to examine the man. She prodded it with her finger, almost not believing that it was there. Blank eyes stared up at her. Jayne could feel something rising within her. A desire she had not felt for many years.


She twisted the figure into sitting position, moving it's stiff arms and legs. Running her fingers across its face revealed a stubbled chin. With a small grin, Jayne twisted its head stiffly on its neck, right around, until it's face stared unnaturally backward like an owl. She laughed.


"You found treasure!" Jayne called to Buddy. "Let's take it back to the cottage."


But Buddy was barking and pawing at something else now. Jayne hurried over.


It was another one.


All in all, they found eight men that weekend. They lay in Jayne's cottage where she had twisted and bent all their limbs. They were her treasure. Hers and Buddy's. She scratched at Buddy's head between the ears.


"I wonder what the tide will bring us next," Jayne mumbled. "Maybe a shipment of bricks will wash up next so we can build houses for these Lego men."


© 2017 Andronicus



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You are such a clever, imaginative writer of short stories.. why aren't you famous!!! From start to finish i was intrigued in a gaspy gutchoked way! However the crispy meandering of Jayne and her pal, Buddy, moved me on and on til the tale was finished almost too quickly.. not a criticism.. quite the opposite.

Do you pre-plan before writing or do the words fall into your mind.. just interested? Brilliant language, fine form, fluid wordage.. and clever, clever.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


At first glance I find this very creepy - I guess I've interpreted the story from a dark perspective. I thought Jayne has twisted the limbs and head of REAL bodies, and called them Lego men because she treated them as her toy. Only when I started reading the comments and I got the twist in this twisted story :) Well played, Andronicus!

P.S. What is the true meaning of the title? Twisted bodies, twisted Lego men, or twisted plot?

Posted 1 Month Ago


This was fun and creepy...but more fun than creepy. Loved it. Well done: compact, concise and complete.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Andronicus

1 Month Ago

Thanks for your review Carol. I'm glad you found it complete. I thought so, but not everyone gets it.. read more
oh wow holy s**t, that took a big turn.
At first, it is disgusting and morbid, scary and twisted, and then all of a sudden it turns lighthearted and funny, when the "men " turn into legos! I was very confused, and unsure what this "treasure" was at first, but I love this story of yours!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Andronicus

1 Month Ago

Thanks so much for your review peyton. I'm glad you enjoyed the lighthearted twist. :) I appreciate .. read more
I love that morbid feel and that texture that is a highlight of our own isolation and the lego reference. I think you've created, no, given birth to a character any reader can relate to.

I am a fan of not only tales involving dead but play on words to, I love how you've incoporated 'Twisted' for multiple meanings. You my friend are getting not only my applause but 100 on your rating.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Andronicus

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your enthusiastic response to this story. I'm not entirely sure I should be ha.. read more
Lego is a registered trademark Andronicus so you really should include the little ® beside the brand.
Nahh!! Just kidding...I said that after reading the Pirate poem !! lol

I liked taking this literally and seeing her twist the limbs of shipwrecked cadavers - kind of like Robinson Crusoe meets Norman Bates.
Great idea - well executed - just class!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Andronicus

1 Month Ago

Lol, you're right. Hopefully they wont sue me when the story becomes famous and makes me millions. :.. read more
Sick. Disgusting. Revolting. Got any more?

Posted 5 Months Ago


Andronicus

5 Months Ago

........yes. plenty.
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Zoe
Of course! How can she 'twist' a 'person's' head...that seriously sounded insane...but, woah...what a nice 'twist' lol. Amazing stuff. Keep 'twisting'!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Freaking Lego!

You pulled it off! Had me wondering till the final line. Just as i thought your protagonist was truly mad!

As always, very well written and extremely clever. Keep the smart stories coming. Well done.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Andronicus

1 Month Ago

Woohoo! Gotcha with my plot twist Doooooooodley! Thanks so much for your kind review. I'm glad you l.. read more

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