On the Cusp

to my amazingly wonderful daughter

 

She is beautiful

inside and out

She is fierce

and loyal throughout

Knowing right from wrong

she'll never compromise

She's on the verge of something beautiful

right before my eyes.

She knows truth

from it she never strays

She knows her friends

those she never betrays

She cries

but holds tears close to her heart

Never on her sleeve

for those to tear apart

She is strong

She could stand against a gale

To uphold her values

those are not for sale.

Better watch it, if your kicking those who are down

better just hope that she is not around

She is beautiful

yet only just fourteen

She is beautiful

She could be a queen

The way she c***s her head 

and tells you how it is

Even when you don't want to hear it

especially from a kid

She pulls no punches

She only speaks the truth

Holds herself to her own standards

even in her youth

Womanhood just on the cusp.

She is beautiful

I want to be her when I grow up.

Author's Note

Can anyone tell me how to fix the problem with the picture and text. techie idiot here.

Reviews

[Tommy]

Oh, but she is who she is because of you. This is a sweet ode to your daughter. I think it flows very well, and has a message in it, which says, we can learn from anyone if we open our hearts to their wisdom. Your daughter sounds like a treasure, and I am sure she treasures you in the same likes.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Tg1492]

You made her what she is, you should be incredibly proud.

[David Scott]

Loved the pic!
The write was brilliant!!! Sorry but three was needed here.
I can relate to this soooo much. I told my wife last night that I was so proud of my daughter. She humbles me. She is the better version of me. What I could have been before I messed things up... What a gift to your baby girl! I felt this one on my heart!

[Angela]

What more can we really ask for but a better version of who we are or a look at who we might have been, if only.... Thank you.

[Celeste21]

Coming of age is enlightening whether it's your daughter your speak of or someone else. It is always beautiful to watch a rose bloom.

[Tony]

Given that her mother is moved to write as such,
I am sure she will be all you dream and more.
I don't see anything wrong with the text......
and the image is cool as well....
hmmm.....

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Your reviewers, at least some of them think this is about your daughter which I also believe to be true---- for the most part. However,The by last two lines I got the impression that she was writing about her mom for if as stated your daughter is but 14 years old than she is still growing whereas her mom (you) her her role model. I don't think this is what was intended but this is what I gathered from the poem. Which could be a mistake on my part because you may feel that at 14 she is more mature than you were at her age.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

As far as the question in the Author's note, maybe balance the text beneath the picture.
The poem is very beautiful. A nice tribute to your daughter. (and yourself) I love my kids, so i easily felt the pride here. In addition, I got a chance to reflect on how much of my Parents are in me, in ways that are quite surprising.
Thank you.
Excellent!

[Robin]

an absolutely lovely tribute to your daughter ~ excellent qualities you have nourished within her ~

[Maureen Mwaniki]

The poem is beautiful,easy flowing,the rhyme isnt forced...its just beautiful!and that sweet she is all she is because of her mother!so look in the mirror and tell the person looking back she is a wonderful mother!:)

[northern monkey]

Wow, what a beautiful tribute. This packs love and respect into every line, yet lyrically flows effortlessly. Great job. You should (both) be really proud. Keep it coming........

[Karina Longo]

I love it. "She is beautiful
I want to be her when I grow up." - I think this is so powerful. That's to show how a young lady can be more like a proper adult, a proper human being than most of the tedious 'grown ups'. It's a lovely tribute, your daughter must be so proud of you as you are of her. :)