Sweet Obsession

 

In the twilight of our many obsessions,

our tiny indiscretions seem to have

sharp tongues and even thicker hides. 

 

We speak in riddles with melancholy sentiments,

opening pathways to places where dreams

spark fires that engulf us in flaming tides.

 

I find myself trapped in a box, tied closed

with silver and gold ribbons, a beautiful thing

but none the less stifling in its confinement,

 

and still I know that you are the giver of freedom,

the one who will unwrap me, and liberate

my soul with your unparalleled refinement.

Reviews

[Khalab Darnell]

wow im speechless. wonderful writing

[Dream Weaver]

The whole first stanza blew me away
as did the rest of this unbelievable write.
This is warm glow on a cool winter night.
I enjoyed it very much.

[Divine Pain]

I enjoyed this piece

"I find myself trapped in a box, tied closed
with silver and gold ribbons, a beautiful thing
but none the less stifling in its confinement,"

I can relate to this part at times.

[Angelic Darkness]

Yes, we are confined sometimes within our own passion, and just takes
the right person to undo us. This is a melodic poem with sensual tones,
and soft strokes. Great job..AD

[Pax Analog]

Remains enigmatic -- as does the felt core of reality.

Your core discernible soul stance, that I believe this poem exemplifies regards a paradox of freedom: Love.

On the one hand, we all know we can't rely on the vagaries of others. On the other hand, no one is an island, and Love is both internally understood and embraced as the very dignity of the self, and contingent upon the intimacy dance with the significant other.

As always, your actual writing is sublimely eloquent. This theme of freedom vis-a-vis Love-Desire -- "Sweet Obsession" -- is profoundly engaging.

Excellent poem, excellent theme, and I look forward to more of your exquisite delvings.

[~The Queen~]

Very deep. your nit just asking the reader to review your making (and i will say making) the reader connect. I'm sure everyone feels this way at some point in their life and you know it so the connection and reletiveness of the poem really are appriate.

[Wildecat]

This is a well written and beautiful poem, a pleasure to read.

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When I read this some time back, I was thrown back by the last verse. Just something private that I felt myself aflutter with strange emotions.

The strongest aspect of this poem besides the obvious excellence in imagery is your dazzling use of metaphors to describe your ideas. That's highly creative, which is something that I would like to emulate more in my stories. The reason why is because it follows the rule of show don't tell much more closely than just standard description where everything is told to the reader. As always, I find motivation in your writing to do more showing than telling.

Do you remember the poem I wrote in response to this piece? ;-)

[Satchmo's Gal]

beautiful. like a rare art. every one can speculate, but only few can appreciate.

[Michael X]

Breathtaking and romantic, the depth is stunning in its composition,
creates and imparts emotion and feelings of sentimental love. Wow.
a really well written and expressed piece of art.