Left behind.

Left behind.

A Poem by Anjali

I left so much behind,
And I collected a lot much in the meantime,
Whatever I had lost behind.

I tried to run ahead,
But the rocks holding me, were behind and not ahead.
So, I looked behind and never ahead.

I thought, I was drowning.
But, there wasn't any water, surrounding.
So, I just went with the flow and kept on drowning.

The sky was a million light years away,
But, I was also away from the ground, far far away.
The sky was inches apart,
But, I let go and flew away.

The Hope was there, all the time.
But, I thought it was a lock,
And the key wasn't there, at any time.
But the lock was already open, Everytime,
And, never saw it, wasting away all my dimes.

I left so much behind,
And I collected a lot which wasn't mine.
Never noticed that I hadn't lost anything behind......





© 2017 Anjali



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The poem emphasizes the idea of things around you holding you back and not giving a person relief. It is very powerful. The fac that you broke it up in stanzas gives it an episodic approach that pushes the idea throughout the poem. This was a great poem. I enjoyed it immensely.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Anjali

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this.
Hey,

Thank you for entering your poem.

The fact that the stanzas were short allowed for fluidity and the story to develop. I enjoyed the presence of hope in your piece and for somebody so young I feel that it is important to never lose sight of hope as it allows you to carry on in times of struggle.

Thanks again!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Anjali

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading and for the sweet words!
I love how it aches me just a lit bit inside because it reminds me of being stuck in a place where I felt like I was being held down. But the only to be free was right in front of me and I just needed to let go. I love reading things I relate to and I think that's what readers like the most. I've read a couple more of you're writings and I've not disliked any so far so keep doing what you're doing.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Anjali

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your sweet words...it really means a lot!
Very well written . . . every line filled with emotions.. "I left so much behind,
And I collected a lot which wasn't mine."
This was the best line and its very true . . . people never value what they have. . . keep sharing

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anjali

10 Months Ago

Thanks!!😊
Sometimes it happens before a miracle....
End was realised realisation that made all come alive...I liked it...:)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anjali

10 Months Ago

Thanks for reading!!
Sensitive piece, though it is very well penned and very good poetry and good use of words as well

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anjali

10 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping by!
Thoughtful...It feels that it took lots of courage to write this one....beautifully written...

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anjali

10 Months Ago

Thank you!
Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

You're welcome.
the repetitions of words are so good... i was bit connected when i was going through... sensitive piece of writing :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anjali

10 Months Ago

Thanks for reading!!

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Anjali
Anjali

Delhi, India



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Hi, I'm anjali, a 16 year old writer, reader and crafter. I'm new at writing poetry and I'm still learning. Hope you like the writings I share.😊 more..

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