LET ME FLY

freedom

You can see me but I try to hide,

The way I move swiftly through the bloated clouds.

I feel free like a snow white dove,

It takes me in its platonic love.

Let me dance like it was my last,

And to never dwell on the past.

 

Take me up so high where I can see the world and my wife

No hesitation so let me fly.

Superior to an eagle or an aeroplane

The liberation from these chains.

Happiness awakes me with pleasure and dignity.

Now I can see the ocean, the water stretches from afar,

From green to blue to gray

 I fly to meet her halfway, so let me fly.

 

She looks at me with a pleading smile

As if I can do something to help.

   Holding her hands saying, ‘’I can be here’’

     A disturbing beeping sound next to my side,

   A heart monitor which showed I was alive.

   Tears of misery fell on my throbbing heart,

           Leaving me here I cannot face alone, but with you

       You’re state of the art that’s close to my heart

        So let me fly…

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

Yes, I believe you have managed a pretty good job here, I understand that YOU understand, it might need some work, but there are some pretty fine phrases and you are young....there is plenty of time to GROW...Well done

[Annie S]

Thank you for your comment i greatly appreciate it :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Fantastic rhythm here throughout your poem here!

[Annie S]

Thank you :)

[anumenon]

i appreciate your effort , in some parts there is a lag ,but it is a smooth poem i believe you can fly superior than eagle and aeroplane

[Annie S]

yes thanks for your comment and i agree it's not well written but it was something that i had to write about :)

[ayosonolowo]

Nice poem i must say, i really like it

[Annie S]

It's not all that great,but thank you :)

[ayosonolowo]

It great to me, and i appreciate the writting

[Annie S]

Thanks again :)

[ayosonolowo]

You're welcome