Morning Silence

           A house as silent as can be on a silent morning. She could here footsteps walking up a set of stairs; a door creaks open and shuts, footsteps again; another door opens SLAM as the door closes. The footsteps make their way up to her; but don’t come to her door instead another. After a few minutes those feet make their way back to their domain in the basement; the house has gone still; no a creature stirs. She wonders what she should know that everything has gone still; wishing to do some more work in her room, she silently climbs out of bed with the thought there is some work to be done, as this girl makes her way around her room to work, a pair of not so silent feet make their way past her door. The morning is still silent but the morning day is about to began. 

Author's Note

This is a rather short short-story, it was all i thought was needed for the story as i thought of it one morning when the house was that silent.

Reviews

[Meg]

I loved this story. It was interesting and drew me in. I would like to see more from you.

[rav1209]

The story is quite confusing. I don't really know what you're trying to convey with this piece. Also, I feel the first sentence is a bit awkward, the reuse of silent is distracting in that sentence and doesn't really illustrate anything for me.

[AnneSam]

Imagine really early in the morning when you can hear every little thing because of how quiet it was

[rav1209]

then you should stop and think how you would describe it. Saying "It was silent as a silent morning" doesn't do anything for me. You should explain how it was so quiet, you've probably heard this before but it rings true, show don't tell.

[AnneSam]

Probably but when I wrote this is was solo early in the morning it was practically everything I heard. Guess I never thought to try and rewrite it

[AnneSam]

U are right, I do need to try and change it up a bit.

[rav1209]

Sorry if I sounded mean, I know hearing stuff like this can be hard to take sometime

[AnneSam]

Itlortfine I've gotten hater mean before for a story I'm working on FanFiction. I've learned to take criticism a lot better

[rav1209]

Well I'm sorry you've received hate for your work, that's always a drag.

[AnneSam]

Thanks but the postive out way sthe hate:) thank you btw, I'll make sure to be more descriptive with certain works

[rav1209]

That's great I'm glad I could be of some help.