Hurry and Flurry

A hurry and a flurry

Everything did go

What once was known

No longer showed

On the land adjoined

What once was lost

No longer sewed

Deep in the grounds below

The eyes of those

Who no longer saw

Was able to see once more

In a hurry and flurry

The winds did blow

The lands did shiver and shake

The seas all tumbled and roared

What once was known

No longer showed

What once was lost

No longer sewed.

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

I enjoyed your poem, and thought your pace was great. The words easily rolled out as I read this allowed. Nice job:
I only wonder about "did shivered"? The lands did shivered and shake ...if you change shivered to shiver it still stays in tense. That was all I saw!

[AnneSam]

Thank you I'll change that and repost it later. :)

[BenKeane]

Nice imagery and good length/pace!

[Luna Lucretia Lawson]

I like the rhyming of this poem and i enjoy the concept of it as well , nicely done