Your way

Can we get it back?

Sweep me up

fly me once again

through silver liquid skies

the way you

used to

 

Wrap me up

bury me once again

in silky layers of adoration

the way you

used to

 

Track me down

show me once again

the enchanting magic of love

the way only

you can

Reviews

[Alessander]

short and sweet, almost refreshingly sans ambiguity...it's like one of those old swooner songs from the 50s that unabashedly celebrate high love. Nice visuals, silver liquid skies and silky layers...the former speaks to the sublime aspect of love, while the latter about the more comforting mundane. There is one shift in the poem which caught my eye...you ended the first two stanzas with "the way you/used to" but the last stanza with "the way only/you can"...the first two are a bit more nostalgic, while the last seems to end in a happier note...

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I love simple poems, no many words needed to express what we feel , I felt your longing for days which hopefully will be back .. lovely , a bit sad

[Cafe Reader]

Really beautiful writing!

[Brett Campaigne]

The structure lends itself to that powerful visceral third line, and you deliver it strongly, elegantly and excellently simplistic.

[Crowley]

Sometimes when the lust part isn't burning as brightly as it used to it takes some work to get those juices flowing again. Depends on what each part wants I think and whether the can hold on to those things they saw in the their loved ones to begin with. Very identifiable feelings.

[.]

this is a sentimental lament...almost song like..

[InkSlinger]

Wrap me up in your loving words
leaving me thirsting for more
under darken skies, where our worlds meet
love undying, wanting, tasting like before..

Promise me your hand
and we shall ride the highest
overseeing the world below
loving in unselfish rapture...

[Wondering Mind]

I hope the "you" meant here reads this.

[.]

. oh, that's beautiful ... if someone wrote that for me ... i'd travel half way across the universe ... to relent ...