Eyes Of Mine

 

Eyes Of Mine

 

Remember that day, you looked me in the face?

The reflection of the sun leaving lines in it’s place.

Blue eyes mean nothing but reflections of skies

All they’ll do is dazzle you, so look on behind,

because superficial mirrors are these eyes of mine

black, as is night, when the moon won’t shine,

and in stormy weather are only a sign:

That the world appears different, through overcast eyes.

 

Reviews

[Lizanne]

This is a wonderful writing . You are a very wise young lady. The eyes are the mirror to the soul, but we tend to only see what we desire in their reflections. They can decieve just like a carnival mirror. You seem to know that to find the truth you will have to look a little deeper. You will be putting your signature on life and in the poetry world with the wonderful writings that you are creating. Everything with that contains words intertwines. Music, Poetry, Painting Stories etc. Just remember that life is the center and inspiration that allows us to create these wonderful things. You are very perceptive in what you see. That is why you can cram so much about the eyes in such a short poem. I truly respect you as a skilled writer.

[Rainbow-Ribbons]

Superficial mirrors a person's eyes sometimes reflecting back to us what is in their soul, sometimes reflecting back to us what they want us to see. And we, in turn, do we see what is truly in that person's eyes, their souls, or what we choose and want and need to see? So hard to say!! This poem had great rhyme and flow; in sp short a poem you said so much!!

[Hello, Goodbye]

Love the brevity and use of compact structure.. you get your point across without going beyond the necessary, I appreciate that.. good write..

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Hey that was such a beautiful poem , I just loved it, I think that the eyes is a reflection of the soul , no matter what color they are, I wrote a poem last week , about Blue eyes, you can check it if you like , Lovely writting Yossi

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the Eyes contest!

[The Cougar's Den]

All they'll do is dazzle you, so look on behind,
because superficial mirrors are these eyes of mine
black, as is night, when the moon won't shine,
and in stormy weather are only a sign:
That the world appears different, through overcast eyes.

I love this! Every single word! Oh man, I wish I'd wrote this! BEAUTIFUL!

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The poem is wonderfully written with a splendid imagery

"because superficial mirrors are these eyes of mine
black, as is night, when the moon won't shine,
and in stormy weather are only a sign:"

These were my favorite lines.
Great job!

[BLACKCRUSH]

Powerful yet so delicate at the same time. "black , as is night, when the moon won't shine,and in stormy weather are only a sign: Your imagery is incredible , the concept of this poem was beautiful. I think you did a wonderful job on this.

[James Paulin]

The message is insightful and I like the melody. I wonder if the topic is fully addressed by being limited in aspect. I think you have depth and meaning that is easily appreciated.

[Luna]

Wow. This is a really great poem. It is short, but it is beautiful.

"Blue eyes mean nothing but reflections of skies
All they'll do is dazzle you, so look on behind,
because superficial mirrors are these eyes of mine"

That was definitely my favorite part. Good job with this.

-Luna