affect

affect

A Poem by TamiViolet
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a few fragments of thought

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The wind covets
silent whispers of
autumn’s dark
secret as her circle
stirs in delight…
slipping…
sliding…
through a labyrinth
of cool streams
cleansing Aphrodite’s
long, strands
of ebony
while eyes undress
me in blushing hues of

yesterday…


© 2009 TamiViolet



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I've been browsing through your work this morning and am delighted to have come across it. Each poem is a study in imagery and sensuality. Really great lines in each of the 4-5 I've read. This one has a slightly different form (nice to see how you slip from one form to another with quiet grace) but is no less effective for the short lines and more direct wording. The only 'flaw' that stood out here was 'silent whispers' - a redundency it seems. The line works as well without 'silence' because a whisper, after all, is still a whisper... shhhhh. :-)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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It's wonderful. I like the last two lines best, and the way you broke it just at the word yesterday really leaves a lasting impression. Great work!
~Jasmine Thousand~

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it is a lovely poem. it reminds me of a flower blooming.

Posted 6 Years Ago


this is so beautiful....has that mystical thing going but no matter the content your writing is brilliant. excellent piece

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a very touching piece...with the wind and the eyes...yesterdays are like the whispers you tenderly speak of...

nice work...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Breathtaking use of imagery. I LOVED it! You are such an amazing artist.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem resembles autumns breeze... while the picture and poem supplement each other well. Good use of multimedia

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was beautiful and I loved the picture that you put with it. Such a soft melody with this one when read aloud and wonderful flow.

xxoxx

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your words create a most beautiful, softly moving image that seems to transcend time... Here you stand in the moment looking back across yesterdays... such a sense of tender depth... I loved this write..


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Affect -that golden key that unlocks the gates around our hearts, your images breathe in perfect flow .

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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