Impact

Impact

A Poem by TamiViolet
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deliberately short...a bit different...

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We crashed Heaven

This evening;

The stars -

Wouldn't interfere;

The planets -

Laughed ~

Even Venus;

The moon

Needed nothing -

But

Tonight...

 

 

© 2010 TamiViolet


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It seems to me, the shorter you write, the more difficult it is to fully appreciate it, as in others, I will have to read this over and over again trying to find all meanings, yet, this is not a bad criticism, I love it when a writing encourages me to ponder through it, trully marvelous. Excellent writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Great imagery. Simple, yet full of of feeling. Perfectly captured...

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hehe, I liked this. It's as if they both were running to get away to be alone. Then when they got to be alone; it's as if somebody turned on the lights and said, "Hey, there!" lol. It definitely has a romantic feel, and twas written really well. Cool poem :)

M.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful poem. Photos made words come alive. You said so much with so few words. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Now that is short and to the point. Excellent visuals. Stunning. Sorry I haven't been on much. My computer is down and I'm using the one at work before I clock in in the morning. Hope to have a new one soon. Pass the word please. Anyway, great write. Keep 'em coming. ;)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simple, yet subtle, this piece creates an upside-down sense of feeling grounded in the sky, and the fine accompanying image finesses the spirit of elegant play.

After all, even the earth and all the bodies and subjective depths attendant are made entirely, inner and outer, of S-P-A-C-E.

Heavenly, earthly epiphany.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a very cool piece ..i like how visual this piece is... the flow was good too.. short but i enjoyed the whole feel of this piece..nice job!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the image with this poem.
Short n Sweetly deliberate.
I like it :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very good

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I need something. Maybe tonight. Maybe the moon. It's too early to say.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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