Cause and Effect

Cause and Effect

A Poem by TamiViolet
"

just my imagination.... Derive your own meaning, my friends...

"


Shattered Smirnoff bottles of
                     Butterfly wings,

                       Broken dishes...regret

Black Velvet horses beyond reason...

Time can never mend reckless whispers;
                     Do you bleed as I do?




© 2010 TamiViolet



Author's Note

TamiViolet
This is a short one although I felt I said what needed to be said... Sometimes life is not pretty, yes?

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This is almost as if you've taken the images of some nightmare and thrown them onto a page. So intriguing, jagged and poignant all at once !
You've done a phenomenal job with very few words.
Well done :)
And thank you also for the review of my work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is a very concise writing and there in lies the power. I really like it. I also really like Smirnoff ;)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is almost as if you've taken the images of some nightmare and thrown them onto a page. So intriguing, jagged and poignant all at once !
You've done a phenomenal job with very few words.
Well done :)
And thank you also for the review of my work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sometimes the short poems has more meaning than big once! Your had a wallop of meaning, excellent

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

short but very powerful and deep.. overall i thought you did well on this ..like the cross out line effect too..

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There's tragedy in every line of this .. it's powerful, deep, yet rings of fragility .. the picture just rams home the core and creates writing that is dramatic to the point of terror.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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oh this is powerful and in your face - it tells it as it is - the red splashes your mind and the picture is so apt the last line, chilling!! brilliant!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blood, blood , blood everywhere..It's perfect, just the right choice of words and length. Perfect, elegant and a master shorty.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

f**k! i am blown! this was pure, raw, powerful and angry diaplay of emotions...and the picture just adds on to the darkness created by intoxicants and anger..peraps a little bit of hatred also...it was like the writer is holding someone by the collar of his shirt and asking...asking a question that she knows will never be answered by that voice that is not audible now...
i hope that the pain the writer was going through got vented out through this piece...


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a short piece stinging and all powerful ..showing the force within....

Well Crafted!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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