Cause and Effect

just my imagination.... Derive your own meaning, my friends...

Shattered Smirnoff bottles of
                     Butterfly wings,

                       Broken dishes...regret

Black Velvet horses beyond reason...

Time can never mend reckless whispers;
                     Do you bleed as I do?

Author's Note

This is a short one although I felt I said what needed to be said... Sometimes life is not pretty, yes?

Reviews

[Bertie]

This is almost as if you've taken the images of some nightmare and thrown them onto a page. So intriguing, jagged and poignant all at once !
You've done a phenomenal job with very few words.
Well done :)
And thank you also for the review of my work.

[Dani California]

Hmm. How did I miss this?

Regret. I don't know if that was the intent, but it's what comes to mind immediately. Perhaps drowning that regret in alcohol, thus causing an emotional outburst of sorts and then, of course, more regret. The self-torture that follows when wondering if the other person also feels this pain, or if they even care. "DO I BLEED ALONE??!"

Raw, human nature -- emotional pain -- bottled bandages without warning on their labels.

Okay -- I'm getting carried away again. lol As always, lovely lady, your work reflects deeply our human element and triggers an emotional response in the reader. Even, in a few short lines. You're awesome.

xoxo

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Wow, this is to the gritty, I enjoyed this alot. Love the pic!

[Abigail T]

Holy wow! So intense and powerful and raw... and yet so short. It takes talent to convey such an extreme feeling in such a short piece. Great, great work! And I loved the last line.

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that was hard hitting..seems to tell a story in a short poem...that's a skill in it's self..great gritty write

[The Viking]

The last line reminded me of the song "37mm" by AFI, their line is "Do you fall too?" Who the narrator is speaking to is a bit of a mystery to me, though. She obviously feels her pain is universal and is looking for someone to sympathize with. The broken dishes and smirnoff bottles of butterfly wings probably reference beautiful things in her life that were destroyed by loose words. With the last line, "Time Can Never Mend Reckless Whispers," it leads me to believe that this poem is about a girl who told someone she thought she could trust a deep secret that she only shared with people she really cared about, and this person instead told this secret to others and put her on blast, thus shattering those dishes and the bottles of wings. This is something that can't be undone and can't be forgiven, at least not in her eyes. Beautiful and sad. Well done, love.

[Robin]

so much emotion in this , the title is perfect

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Wow! What else can I say when other writers have already given so many reviews about this? Superb and amazing writing!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I'm in awe with the immense intensity and power of this piece. Everything about this writing is absolutely flawless! You have depicted that feeling of loneliness, depression and heartbroken so perfectly here.
"Black Velvet horses beyond reason.." - Ah! Loved this line, it conveys such a deep meaning with the deep metaphor behind it.
Brilliant usage of words at right places, Great work. I for the one absolutely loved it!