Deep Sleep

Deep Sleep

A Story by April Blue Flores

She fell into a deep sleep, upon waking she found herself in a pool of her own blood while caught in limbo. Hades was beneath her and heaven above her just out of reach. The iron gates before her that lead to her freedom from her chains. There stood an angel dressed in midnight. The frail fragile spirit shook at the iron gates for entrance. Blood red tears streamed down her face as she trembled with fear, "Let me in! Let me in!" The angel roared with laughter and out came a boom of his voice, "You were never good enough to enter heaven and never bad enough to enter hell; therefore you shall lie in a pool of your spewing blood in limbo for eternity." This she did not want to hear and shoved her hands to her ears to close the echoes of the tragedies she accomplished while on earth. Forever in limbo. Forever in a pool weeping blood. Forever the echoes in her ears! Forever! 


© 2018 April Blue Flores



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April Blue Flores
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You do well in with flash fiction. Admirable trait; to paint big pictures, with few words. This epitomises the adage of, 'one picture is worth a thousand words'. We paint the "images" (with minimal words) that place the thousands of words in the mind of the reader by way of imagery. Indeed we carefully compose a snapshot or scene, that tells the long story, with very few words. Kudoes.

Posted 4 Months Ago


April Blue Flores

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much, I really appreciate your amazing review..
VALORMORE DE PLUME

4 Months Ago

You're welcome.
I like this story. It sounds like the ending to a great novel, but again it could be the beginning. As I read it I saw it play out like a t.v. series. Very creative. Nothing worse for a soul than to be stuck in limbo. Ah but for the grace of God we move on beyond this life. What that life is, is up to us. Good read. please keep writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


April Blue Flores

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your review..
Does the pic express a personal concept of invulnerability coupled with a self-belief of "ME" choice without bearing responsibility because there can be no self-consequence? - just curious.

The story - a "forever existence" - unchangingly and unfeelingly trapped in a middle yet able to perceive what you haven't access to or an ability to be a part of... fiendish in a way. Purgatory was supposed to be a "timed" penance until a soul was "cleansed" for its inclusion within the Creator's Presence ...some "understandings" have been re-thought. So I guess she/he "settled" for a companionship/financial/personal positional type of relationship vs dual-Love-empowering togetherness and as always ...well, things change as the "little" things come to matter after all.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Did she commit suicide when she still alive that is why she cannot enter either on hell or heaven?If it is the reason how sad.
Life is sometimes cruel or unfair, some bad things happening in our lives wether we like it or not, but for me killing yourself is not the answer.We should do our best to conquer those problems comes in our lives because God is always there to love and guide us.sorry for my bad grammars.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Eiram

4 Months Ago

Oh my mistake,but glad to hear she didn't.Kind of nightmare? so vivid,many times I had also dreams t.. read more
April Blue Flores

4 Months Ago

I think it does have a meaning to it but not too sure when it comes to dreams or nightmares...
Eiram

4 Months Ago

Yeah me too sometimes I dont undertand why I am dreaming that kind of dreams.
This is beautiful . Touching. The. Accompanying art is great coupled with a great soundtrack. You keep nailing it through the park. I am very proud of you for this.

Posted 4 Months Ago


April Blue Flores

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your amazing review my BFF!! :)
Well said April. Your writings I can visualize and feel through the readings. I'm sure there are many of us that feel at times this story.

Posted 4 Months Ago


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April Blue Flores

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this and you amazing review.. Yes, i agree..
Purgatory. A bad place to end. Not good enough for heaven and too good for hell. Could be a beginning of a journey. Thank you April for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


April Blue Flores

5 Months Ago

Thank you, you are always so kind enough to read what I have to write...
Coyote Poetry

5 Months Ago

I wrote of Purgatory often and you are welcome April.

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April Blue Flores
April Blue Flores

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