If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[Dipanjan Dutta]

If only I am allowed to criticize, I would say just a WOW.

The four lines, "If I were an angel...sinful amd divine" - an exceptionally beautiful creation.

The rhythm is fabulously managed throughout and I LOVED this. :) :)

[AprilRN1210]

this is a pretty awesome review, thank you so much.. tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. did it while daydreaming during meeting at work... shhhh don't tell anyone... :D

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

if i were a dictionary, acquanting brains with diction and articulation, i would know all these words at a go.i did a lot of dictionary check on this poem, but i am glad it brings more than just reading but vocab building and it really stimulates excitemnet.

[AprilRN1210]

haha, cute.. I am a word nerd, what can I say.. hope it was still enjoyable, despite the need for assistance.. thank you my friend.. nice to see you! hope you have been well.. :)

[linear]

If Only.


Sweet rhythm to the beat


If Only


We could all fly.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you again.. not sure I'd wanna fly... think I would choose a different super power.. tickled you enjoyed this scribble.

[linear]

You have a problem with heights....yeeek me too haha

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Really like the flow of this. You are a poet and you paint with words :) Fabulous flowing bright images

[AprilRN1210]

wow, that is quite a compliment, thank you so much! I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble..

[Terpsichore]

Be nice for you just to visit. You choose.

[AprilRN1210]

will do!... and thank you again :)

[Jeannette Lunete]

Very well written composition of daydreaming confessions. The spirit that is shinig through your work is very refreshing. Keep it up. :)

[AprilRN1210]

that is very sweet of you to say, thank you so much.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble:)

[Terpsichore]

Nice thinking and a dreamy start to the day.

Like your reply about doodling during a boring meeting. I do it all the time. Mostly it's tolerated, but occasionally I get a frown from a higher being.

T

[AprilRN1210]

well, hello there! nice to meet you.. I am the boss for most purposes, but have to act like I am listening most of the time.. haha.. glad you could relate and enjoyed.. thank you for this lovely review.. I would love to return the favor, is there a specific piece you would like me to check out?.. a favorite perhaps?

[Moonie]

Wow, a new take on the childish fantasies. Your word choice is perfect! My favourite lines would be
"infatuation’s aphrodisiac
dulcet, aromatic affection"

This one ticks all the right boxes!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for this lovely, glowing review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble :)

[Troy Henson]

Simplistic, real, soothing, meaningful....what more can I say. This really makes me question my own thought processes. This gives light to hope and that we should never judge by what we perceive....

Nice April:)

[AprilRN1210]

thank ya.. it came about actually from me doodling on my notebook during a boring meeting at work.. I drew an angel, and a flower and just started scribbling.. I am tickled you like it... :)

[DJ]

Refreshingly simple and elegant,nicely written.

[AprilRN1210]

well hey you!! thank you so much.. This was a little scribble that started out with me daydreaming during a meeting at work.. lol
I was tickled with the way it came out, and am tickled that you enjoyed it:)
thank you DJ.. it is always a pleasure to see you my friend..