If......

just thinking out loud

If I were a Star

glittering, animated fun

incandescent illumination

second only to the sun.

 

If I were a  Flower

fleshy petals dripping confection

infatuation’s aphrodisiac

dulcet, aromatic affection.

 

If I were an  Angel

alluring mankind

bewitching enticement

both sinful and divine.

 

If I were a Dream

tantalizing, magnetic illusion

provocative stimulation

delicious diverting delusion.

 

 

If I were a Thought

refreshing delight

entertain, captivate

stimulate and excite.

Reviews

[Tree]

Star Flower Angel Dream Thought. These bold headliner words are by themselves a poem, and you poeticize around each one of those words in a creative, and rhythmic way. I like when you liken the dream to/ Magnetic illusion. very cool way to describe the energy we build upon and harness in our deepest sleep.


Diego

[AprilRN1210]

thank you for an equally detailed, insightful review.. I am tickled you enjoyed this scribble.. I wrote it while "daydreaming" at work.. wishing to be anything and anywhere else.. these images are what flowed from my pen.. I appreciate your time and thoughts, it means a lot coming from someone who writes as well as you do:)

[icelandicblue]

Each subject you've written about glows upon the page. The poem is beautiful and I love that you wrote of two sides to angels. This is quite an inspirational piece of writing which I thoroughly enjoyed.

[AprilRN1210]

I love this review, you are too kind. Thank you so much! have me smiling inside and out right now! :)

[Wórdsmíth]

Nice imagery. I like how you use words. That`s quiet enjoyable to read with time. Wishes are made to be wished & the mind`s designed to be "wicked". Keep it up!

[AprilRN1210]

hello again! Thank you for another lovey review.. I am glad you enjoyed.. I would love to return the favor, any piece in particular you would like me to read?

[Wórdsmíth]

Hi there! Always a pleasure to get floated along the streams of your "naughty" words.
Well ... Neah, you can read anyone if you feel cool with that. I love reading stuffs and that`s all what brought me on here .. on this cafe`s site to read many people stuffs that are written in diff. diff. formats so, I read and the great thing, this cafe`s site has also provided the feature to "leave reviews" to others so, it`s good by me to let others know.. my thoughts on their writes.

[Rita L. Sev]

Oh, what lovely Ifs... I like the form you used here; the different fonts add an artistic element and adds to the mystical feel of the piece.

[AprilRN1210]

Hey again girl! This one was so fun to write, I am glad you enjoyed.. was a random passing thought one day and am quite tickled with how it turned out.. thank you!

[B.J]

Nice work, I enjoyed the read. All the "if's" in life

[AprilRN1210]

thank you so much... was a random scribble and I am glad you enjoyed...

[B.J]

you're welcome

[Urja Gokani]

its is great good job!!!!!!!!!!!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you.... I am glad you enjoyed..

[Urja Gokani]

no problem

[BennyBooth]

I like this piece a lot! You have a serious talent.....

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed:)

[realmwriter]

I would shine upon the gloom
I would take away the frown
Granted your wish to me

I would bloom in your heart
I would comfort your soul
Growing in the weed

I would watch over you my child
I would help you along your path
Blessing fall upon you

I would desire to come true
I would write a life anew
Sleep in love my child

I would think only of peace
I would think only of you
Think of me always.

I always write when inspiration strikes April and I love this piece. You're talent surpasses me.

[AprilRN1210]

That is a lovely piece Derick, thank you for sharing with me.. I am tickled I could inspire that.. Thank you... such a sweet, beautiful spirit... get two gold stars for that. :P

[realmwriter]

Your welcome but I haven't published it yet. I did just post a new piece though and I'm going to do it as spoken word and post it on facebook.

[AprilRN1210]

how cool, well that sounds awesome... don't do facebook, but I am sure your friends and family love your work just as much as we do!!

[realmwriter]

Sadly my friends and family don't really read my work. Well my dad and brother read some of it. How come you don't do facebook? Can I post spoken word on WC?

[AprilRN1210]

Of course you can! When u are ready to try and put it up here message me and I will walk you trough it, really not that hard... I have added mine to a few pieces just for fun and Robin has added him and his friends rapping and singing on his which is awesome...

[realmwriter]

Cool. I have to rehearse it a few times so I can get the cadence right but I'll let you know when I am ready. Thank you so much April for all of your help.

[AprilRN1210]

Anytime Derick... and ignore the typos.. jeez... I shouldn't be allowed near a computer when altered... oh my goodness makes me giggle...

[realmwriter]

Typos bother me not but in my own works and replies.

[realmwriter]

An how do you mean altered? By what?

[AprilRN1210]

....you just replying to that now?.. that was around the time I was on pain medication that made my brain silly and fuzzy.. well, more than usual.. lol

[realmwriter]

Yeah well I'm late. So sew me. lol I know pain meds, but none of them worked for me. I didn't really have that kind of pain. Mine was more of the heart and the brain. Anyway I am beginning to digress and I should avoid that here.

[AprilRN1210]

sew you, or sue you?... :P
avoid that here... hmmmm... if you say so...

[realmwriter]

Sue. Boy or girl or law. I always get that wrong. Cause I don't mean to stich but I can never remember which to use and when or where. Oh but a boy named him or her would be so cruel.

[AprilRN1210]

was good for a giggle.. I have a few words that confuse me at times..

[HungryGhost]

Such beautifully used adjectives. Your creation of visuals are amazing! I loved it :) Care to check mine out?

[AprilRN1210]

Well, hello! Nice to meet you, thank you for the lovely review. Of course, is there a particular piece you would like me to read?

[HungryGhost]

No, not really :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I am so down with this. It's the real deal

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you sir.. It is always a pleasure to have you drop by and visit one of my pieces.. I am glad you enjoyed my daydream scribble. I admit, it is one of my favorites..

[Anahat]

Straight away going to my favourites...Simply awesome :)

[AprilRN1210]

You are so sweet, ma'am! Thank you. I am tickled you enjoyed this one and it is a favorite:)

[Anahat]

Pleasure is all mine :)