Broken Glass (18)

Lol uhmmmmmm you're all probably going to think I'm like insane, or an axe murderer, i am neither but i do hope ur a disturbed by this

Broken Glass

It lay at my feet

It was my knife

The tool to slay the living

And the welcome basket of the dead

The blood of the lifeless in pools

The smell of rot all around

Sickly

Rancid

But strangely Beautiful

I look at my hands

I need to know what happens next

The blood drips like rain all over

Blocking them

Leaving only red

Devouring what was me

Leaving only sadness and despair

I hear the whispers

I could have sworn they left

They told me they would

But they remained

The urging voices to kill

The ones that told me to pick up the glass

To strike those who I despised

They had lied to me

I was angry 

Nothing had changed 

Only now I was in deeper than before

I belonged to the voices now

I was their puppet

And there was only one thing left to do

And that was

To Kill

I picked up the broken glass

My reflection within but without

I moved through the doors that belonged to the slain

And waited for my next victim

The voices said they were sorry

They promised next time they would leave

So I let them lead me

Down the dark tunnel

A twisted hope in my heart

And a piece of Glass in my hand

Author's Note

uhhhhm IM NOT PSYCHO!

Reviews

[Katherine S.]

I really liked this! This was done very well to capture the thoughts of someone who comes off as insane, especially when the writer claims not to be psycho herself, lol. :P I loved the imagery and flow, wonderful poem! :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

heh... A) I'm a dude O_o (last time i checked I most definitely wasn't lacking in er... shall we say extra fingers? And sincerely lacking in the upper bosom department, I take flat as a board to a whole new level) B) I claim to have nothing beyond the normal lvl of psychosis that approx. 70% of the human race contains C) What can I say? I'm observant? I watch a lot of movies? I contemplate what the possible mindsets of said psycho's may be from time to time just because human's fascinate me? Lol~ Thanks for reviewing and glad you liked it :3

[Katherine S.]

I did mean to write "themself", but my autocorrect didn't like that apparently. -.- Haha, I think we all have a bit of a psychotic side to us. :P You're welcome.

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol s'all good and oh most definitely only 18% of the population can even claim not to have any form of mental illness so that tells you something about us LOL. I just figure the otherwise legally "sane" ones are better at coping than the crazy crazies

[Katherine S.]

Haha, that's very true.

[Tsukin Archangel]

so hue, lets be insanely sane together eh?

[Katherine S.]

Sounds good to me. :P

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol, might as well if it's unavoidable right? lol

[Katherine S.]

Haha, yep!

[Helena]

Another fantastic write for the gothic contest from a very good poet. This was dark and full of unforgettable imagery of a subject that I suspect would be spot on. Well done again!

Helena

[Tsukin Archangel]

Thanks! Glad you thought so!! I honestly have like no idea what prompted this poem lol... but yeah... it fit the theme soooo CAME IN HANDY!!!

[angelina neves]

nice gothic!

[Tsukin Archangel]

THANKS!!! Glad you liked it :3

[Kelsey]

"I picked up the broken glass / My reflection within but without" This is my favorite part, it's so deep. Wonderful job. It takes a curious mind and a wide imagination to put something like this together, and so well, at that.

[Tsukin Archangel]

I'm glad u enjoyed it :3 Yes me and my......unique way of looking at things...i blame anime for my understanding of psycho's ^^; THANKS AGAIN i hope u'll read some of my other stuff too :3 *bows*

[.]

DARK and SCARY for this one! 100/100 I love your poems!

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks :3 i'm glad u liked it~ i really did try and capture the feeling of a schizophrenic....i think or just a psycho killer in general....i was in a bad mood lol

[.]

you're welcome! :D

[Tsukin Archangel]

you should check out my book dare if u havent :o u might like it

[.]

OK! I will! :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

sweet~ :3 i look forward to ur critique :3

[kublakhan27]

It does indeed pack a ominous punch, but that's the sign of a good writer, when you can step outside yourself and go against the grain of your own sentiments and tendencies...I'd say you've pulled that off more than sufficiently here lol :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol thanks I try but yeah not schizo which I think is what this person is but if u got chills mission accomplished lol Ty for reading :3 oh and uh just for the sake of shameless advertising u should check out the book I'm writing Dare u might enjoy it lol

[kublakhan27]

Oh I've long believed I have a split personality, and the laundry list of ailments on my profile all point to that possibility even though I've been told I don't have one LOL I'm not great with books just cuz of time constraints but I will certainly check it out if I get a chance :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

sweet~ lol and well if u wake up naked covered in blood with no idea what happened u can assume u have a split personality lol

[kublakhan27]

LOL I'm hoping the other personality is a little more diplomatic than that but I wouldn't be that lucky :P

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol well u never know gotta be ready for anything

[kublakhan27]

lol exactly, and the lukewarm response I've been getting towards my own stuff as of late is preparing me for just that :P

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol uh oh dont kill me other u

[kublakhan27]

Haha don' worry, you're safe...it's the people I went to school with that should worry the most...I hated school, and I use every opportunity (like this one) to make people aware of that LOL

[Tsukin Archangel]

LOL high five to that

[kublakhan27]

lol *high-five*

[The Jay]

Lol. I like it. The urges, the voices, and no matter how much you want them to go away, you almost always end up succumbing to them.

[Brittany]

Dark and Disturbing and I'm thinking Mind of a Psychopath. Not sure how you tapped that, but well done (I think).

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the calmness in this story. The story is dark. But I like the flow of thoughts and the holding of glass in her hand. A entertaining poem. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote