Voices

A Poem by Arizona Sky

Voices of Question

Ripples in the Crowded Streets

The Streets of My Mind

© 2011 Arizona Sky

Author's Note

Again...short.
It is a Haiku afterall. :)

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a nice Senryu here!! well placed - the voices of question hmm streets of mind - I really like the notions here - the idea of the voice rippling through the mind - the conscious maybe whispering little tidbits here and there - barely audible over the "crowds" of other thoughts! nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Roger Morrison

It is good, but I agree with the last review on the repetition of streets. Still, gets a clear message across. The voice of unsurety trumping out all the other thoughts. Great work.

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matthew Smith

This is nice, but I would advise against the repetition of "Streets". Perhaps something like this, as an example:
"Ripples in the crowded streets
Freeway of my mind." Or some such substitute.

Other than, I enjoyed it, for a haiku.

Posted 13 Years Ago

0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on March 2, 2011
Last Updated on March 2, 2011

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Arizona Sky

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I'm a young teen very inspired by great authors, musicians and artists of any and all kinds. My brother inspired me to begin to write real stories (short stories) when he wrote a wonderful paper in .. more..