Side Effects

when the past hunts you and the future doesn't seem bright

the chilling feeling 

of these lingering residues 

of once conquered deviant 

ghoulish physical and emotional incommodious shades

often return to admonish me

that my thoughts of safety and paragon are nothing 

but mere illusions,

are they really, just mere illusions, i often think to myself,

well that's just what these fiends want me to think,

i never exactly expected smooth sailing through life though,

but i find that these abominable, dreadful, direful and 

horrendous side effects are the true illusions.

 

Author's Note

can you relate

Reviews

[Calamityofgin]

I love this...the words are a great feast for the tongue..and you can incorporate your own demons and tribulations into the piece.
Though the answer my friend, is they are if you let them be.
I use very little punctuation at times. Though if i choose to use it..find it makes things more fluid if i use it correctly throughout. Think it would serve the piece well..and give it more impact if a few periods were placed where some commas are.

This is a stellar piece as is..love incommodious shades..that line is yummy on the taste buds and quite effective in giving this piece its foul feel the effects have on your senses..brava!

Love and wishes of a sensory reality that soothes.

Calamity of j

[Quill]

your reviews are always so deeply detailed, you do take your time to analyse, it's always nice to have someone like you as a reviewer. thanks for reviewing i would try to improve on my writing

[Calamityofgin]

You are a great writer..was certainly not inferring otherwise darlin..i am a horrible editor of mihself. As said..stellar as is..just might improve impact..like on the line at the end..feinds want me to think. Just might be a lil more declarative. But no biggie dear..fully effective on its own fine merits.

[Philip Muls]

Side effects which after a while turn out to be the core illusion. Strong concept. Side versus core.

[Quill]

thanks for the review

[A.marie.speaks]

I can definitely relate. You've described my current state perfectly. Great writing!

[cycy]

very interesting perspective here. i admire the way you used such bold words to describe it. intellectually provoking piece here, well written and im sure we can all relate there is always that balance between dealing with the past, working towards the future and all at once accomodating the present.

[B. Boileau]

You paint with your words the sad but true side effects life sometimes deals. But they are truer discibed as illusions. Nice work A.
B.

[Quill]

glad you liked it

[TrishArias]

Yes I can definitely relate!!!

[Quill]

always nice to see someone who sees things the same way i do

[Zugzwang]

The shades of the past will always return to haunt us, I feel, and while we may experience reprieve (perhaps for long periods of time), they will always return.
I can relate.

[Quill]

yeah those dark pasts may never die, better to learn to live with them

[Laura S-C]

It was a nice poem, though I personally (embarrassingly) found a few words difficult to understand. The general idea though yes, I can relate.