Holding Me Back

Holding Me Back

A Poem by Amanda Patschke
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A teenager is overprotected by his/her twin brother, who is somehow a dangerous threat to society. He/she has to make the difficult choice to risk his/her life trying to help him or to betray him.

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Verse 1

Holding me back.

Let me go.

I won’t relax.

You should know.

Holding my breath.

Drowning me

Till no air’s left.

I can’t breathe.

 

Chorus

Who are you to cage me up in here?

I can handle my own life.

Always protecting me everywhere

Like I need you all the time.

 

Bridge

You’re not my big brother.

We’re both the same age.

So then why are you acting this way?

You know I will never

Believe what you say.

Now I just can’t stay another day.

 

Verse 2

They’re all burning

In your fire

While I’m crying

In denial. 

What can I do

To shut out

The good in you

From my heart?

 

How can I bear

To let you go?

 

Ending

Angry at what

You have become,

I have to cut

Out what’s been done.


© 2014 Amanda Patschke



Author's Note

Amanda Patschke
Do you think the speaker should be a boy or girl? Do you take the fire as symbolism or reality? What do you think his/her brother is threatening?

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I take it as overprotective or possessive. The speaker should be a female seeing you wrote it and it would bring a stronger sense of emotion to the song with the perspective of an overprotective male whom really wants more then friendship. I gather that from the lines:
"You’re not my big brother.
We’re both the same age.
So then why are you acting this way?"

If it was a male I would assume the natural balance to personality and that the speaker is more passive then the "big brother" so big brother tends to be the one to watch over the more passive individual.

The fire is definitely symbolism. In my perspective, fire=strength/anger/control by the emotion of powerlessness from the speaker.
I hope this helps, it reads rather nicely id be interested in hearing it to music. What genre would this be for?

Good write!

Melanie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Poem is very good. Flowed like good music. I like the passion and sadness in your words. A very good poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 23, 2009
Last Updated on May 8, 2014
Tags: lyrics, teen, poem, brother, protective, fear, betrayal, twins

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Amanda Patschke
Amanda Patschke

Pearland, TX



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School: Pearland High School '11 San Jacinto South College University of Houston Central Sex: Female Birthday: February 23, 1993 Siblings: one older sister Political Views: Republican Rel.. more..

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