My Hue

A poem that expresses one's strong faith towards his creator

As He strokes my hand with the pencil.
My bosom shouted for the greatness I felt.
My trust made my life so well,
As an ice in summer that will never melt.

As He mixes the colors in my heart,
I mention His name without a reward.
My world's mate almost tear me apart,
But His light says, "Move forward."

As He shades the edge of my faith,
My eyes clearly saw His face.
Even others said that maybe His a myth;
I believe He's the person behind the grace.

As the lines of my life continue,
Color harmony is there to be the best part.
And when it's unpleasant hue,
He'll cast catchy pigment that proves life is an art.

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

this is beautifully written and could be taken if several ways! i love the thought of it being a guardian angel guiding us ! :))
Love this

[Ashadan]

thanks for your uplifting review =) Im glad you like it.

[Nyanachi]

As an atheist myself I did not understand that it was about God. I thought this was a very good description of the balance between the theme of Love, and Loyalty. I like the idea of hue being used its very psychodelic and I mean that in an artistic way.

[Ashadan]

Thanks for sharing your thought. Im always glad if people could also see my writings in different way. I respect you my friend ^_^

[George Peck]

This one is very deep because it can be taken in so many ways. Like your partner in life of a symbolic of a man and talking about life. Well at least to me it can be taken a couple different ways. I love this poem thanks for sharing with me.

[Ashadan]

Thank you for reviewing my work =) . I'm glad when there are times could also see the other meaning of my write-up =)

[cloakedone]

is the model comparing the art to a man or is there an actual man here?
if i sound harsh,im not trying to

[Ashadan]

The poem has a hidden message about faith my friend. The speaker within the poem expresses his faith towards God. How thankful he was as a creation was expressed through his talent in terms of art that is why the pictures and symbols used were about art =) thanks for reviewing my friend

[cloakedone]

oh would have got the god thing ,but anyways your welcome

[RiverRei]

In the third line of the third stanza, it should be "He's" not, His.

I really like this though. I like how you combined God and painting. You did a great job of intertwining them and creating a clear picture for us as readers. Very good write, thank you for sharing!

[Ashadan]

Thanks for the comment my friend but what I am referring there is not the possessive case of noun ,It is really His, since I'm referring and sentence like this. His cap, his car or his name. I'm pointing to the person himself. =)

[Ashadan]

Thanks for the comment my friend but what I am referring there is not the possessive case of pronoun ,It is really His, since I'm referring and sentence like this. His cap, his car or his name. I'm pointing to the person himself. =)

[Edgar Frost Lovecraft]

This is a vividly beautiful poem. I really enjoy the detail you put into this, you are a very talented writer :)

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work buddy! Enjoyed reading this piece :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful, Ashadan. Thank you for sharing. :) Rudi

[Ashadan]

thanks Rudi. ^_^ Thank you for always reading my poems =)

[marcus]

Beautiful poem! Really enjoyed it!

[Ashadan]

I'm glad to hear that=) thank you for reviewing this poem ^_^

[marcus]

my pleasure

[Peggy-Lou]

Your words are an inspiration
Your heart is not a simple red heart, but a precious ruby that shines from within

[Ashadan]

glad you hear that. Your reviews give me stronger pushy to write again and keep on using my pen =)read moreglad you hear that. Your reviews give me stronger pushy to write again and keep on using my pen =)
Be well!!

[Peggy-Lou]

I'm certainly very impressed with your writing. It's about how you paint your feelings with words

[Ashadan]

Thanks ^_^ Im glad to hear those kind words