Dump was I

Dump was I

A Poem by Ashadan
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There are times that we almost forgot to think for our self and ended up for nothing after giving up everything.

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Dump was I.
        For letting the time die.
                       From three till' dusk.
                                 Even knows for an empty cask.


© 2015 Ashadan



Author's Note

Ashadan
Just few lines I got here and hope you will get my point.

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Well what I see is and I could be wrong... Any way it seems like, someone took "things"for granted...ahem
and got "dumped" and is now drinking in sorrowful regret...:)

I do love this little write..very succinct and intriguing...


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashadan

2 Years Ago

thanks for the compliment =)
a little short but good just seems like it could have had a little more. thanks sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashadan

2 Years Ago

thank you for reading this and for reviewing my work =)
ok this was a confusing peice and it doesnt have any structure

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashadan

2 Years Ago

i did it on purpose my friend. Thanks for your review =)
cloakedone

2 Years Ago

oh ,i cleary see that and nothing to it
I get what you're trying to say, but it wasn't all that clear to me...is English your second language?

Posted 2 Years Ago


Short, great and deep. Keep Writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashadan

2 Years Ago

thanks for reviewing this my friend =)
Nice work my friend... definitely got the message.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Short yet to the point.
Sometimes seldom thoughts proves its power.

Posted 2 Years Ago


A short but deep poem. I don't know why but it somehow gives off vibes of a relationship having a bad end or maybe that's just my imagination. :) Anyway, I like the way you call yourself ''dump''. I might have gone for ''dumb'' but ''dump'' is much, much better to explain the worthlessness you're feeling for having wasted valuable time. A great poem. Four lines with such deep meaning! The poem totally sums up your regret and gives a lesson to the readers as well. Great work! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nice description create vision and thoughts. You said enough in the short poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashadan

2 Years Ago

you are always welcome =)
I like it

Nice and simple

Time is so valuable

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashadan

2 Years Ago

absolutely true. I glad to hear that you like it =)

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Added on April 26, 2015
Last Updated on April 26, 2015
Tags: Disappointed, Sadness, Failure, Sacrifice, Love, Hate, Patience, Time

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Ashadan
Ashadan

Philippines



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I am simple man that only wants to inspire others true writing. I am a poet wanted to be from the Philippines. I am teenager at heart ^_^ just joking. Ashadan is just my pen name since I started writ.. more..

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