One love

One love

A Poem by Ashwin Thakur
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Dedicated to the one i love

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This for you
Guess its who
One in a few
With a wheatish hew

My life is new
Because of you
Now its not the same
I remember the day when you came
It was dramatic
Like a rehersed tactic
Your hair flowing in the wind
It was like a movie unwind
I remember your dress was black
And what i wore looked like a sack

Your hair was jet black
But what was great
No one can hate
Your dark brown eyes
Sweet like apple pies
Smile was so deep
No chance you ever weep
Your hands!!Oh my god!
Save me from her oh lord
Even god have tried to make those hands better
There was no chance he would have got to touch her
However let it be
Girls like these
Oh my you have to pay heavy fees
She was like there for many years forever
I didnt tried to talk to her no never
One day she told everybody
That she was going
I became sad why unknowing
I though this should be the day
For my mouth to open and say
I got her number
And talked to her during slumber
I asked her out
I thought she would shout
But no she said yes
Next day we met
How heartily i talked
Through a beautiful garden we walked
Then we sat somewhere
The sun was setting down
It brought a golden hue on her face that never frown
I wanted to say i wanted to kiss her
And also that i would miss her
We sat there like many hours
In the sky there was no more stars
Then i asked her
Can you see some stars
No she said but there would after some hours
How i said to her
There would be no stars today
How she said me to say
Because they were with me all day
She blushed a little i think
And made a little wink
I thought this is my chance
I said i love her
She stared me a shocking sterner
She stood up and left
I felt like i was theft
There was no reply from her anyway
She must have gone after that day
A call came when i was sleeping
It said come out i am peeping
I remembered the voice
I was excited with joys
I saw i out of a window
She was holding a big banner
It said I LOVE YOU TOO with a heart made of tanner
I could see her eyes from here
And it seemed i would be there
FOREVER

© 2015 Ashwin Thakur



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Ashwin Thakur
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Good job on this one. Happy endings make the world that much better! Keep writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


a wonderful poem about how love finds its way into our lives. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


A good and cute love story. Thank you for sharing! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


so lovely and intense but still so pure and romantic
Love it !

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it
I love this story. How romantic and adorable:) wonderful job

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thanks for giving your time in reading it.
A very good story in the poetry with a happy ending.
"She was holding a big banner
It said I LOVE YOU TOO with a heart made of tanner
I could see her eyes from here
And it seemed i would be there
FOREVER"
If we are lucky. Love will find us. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Well penned feelings. Has a good flow. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thank u gurleen
Gurleen Saluja

2 Years Ago

You're welcome.
WoW!!!
this is truly amazing......beautiful..........
heartfelt.......touching........
a full anatomical appreciation dedication to the much deserved equally awesome lover..........life.......
Bravo!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thank you pushkar for your kind reviews
Pushkar Prabhat

2 Years Ago

you are welcome.............!!! :) :)
Aww..this was beautiful again...
True love well described..
A bit of minor problems here and there...but your feelings overcome that :)
Well penned!

-Anahat :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thank you anahat its greatly appreciated
OMG! Really, love changes everything. True, beautiful, lovely, adorable and romantic feelings. You know, I've never read long poem like this. WOW! It has an amazing flow. I just couldn't stop reading. How adorable was the story! Love it. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Thats a pretty big compliment thank you i would too like to read all your works
And what can.. read more
Destiny Dreamer

2 Years Ago

You are WELCOME :) You can call me Dreamer ;) :)
Ashwin Thakur

2 Years Ago

Ok DREAMER:):)

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Ashwin Thakur
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