A Poem by Ashwin Thakur

Death makes us live our life but it also takes something

Dreams that rose high
Showed our life a big lie
Those brothers lying away down
Died away with no frown
Thier fathers lost a son
Thier mother cried for none
For whom she would cry
Their lifeless eyes still open
For whom she would cook
Or make a funny look
Thier sisters stand still
Everything looks like a hill
Those sisters who now lay down
Will not have live heads to wear that crown
Those people who loved those girls
The men who brought them pearls
They forgot how to love
Those bodies lay bare
Thier cold bodies together they stare
Thier hands still reach out
For us to catch them
And bring them to life
But they didnt knew something
We dont care
How they fare
People die everyday
So why should we stay
And think about afterday
Our heart beat as one
After all we are our natures daughter and sons
Why people have to die
To prove ther lifes a lie
Those big dreams that shattered
For those whom these dreams mattered
The lord is always watching
Those birds who wanted to fly
Thier wings cutted down
We offer our deepest mourns

© 2015 Ashwin Thakur

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death is beautiful........
it signified a definite end or destination of a beginning.......also the start of a new one......
very well written.....
i loved it!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago

Very good! You are a skilled writer and I like the way you paint with words.
Thank you for your review on my poem

Posted 3 Years Ago

A good somber depiction of what the death of a loved one feels like. Yes, but let it be known, "there is nothing that won't perish and there is nothing that can't take form. its the power to believe that life isn't the beginning and death isn't the end, that counts." The sorrow of one passed away was equal to the joy of him being born. Being alive or dead is not really substantial, its how you live that counts. Being remembered forever is as good as living forever. Only the works of the just smell sweet and blossom in their dust. A good heart touching read.

Posted 3 Years Ago

Death and its many faces on all of us
One of the hardest concepts in life to accept

Good one :)

Posted 3 Years Ago

Ashwin Thakur

3 Years Ago

I feel it must be contradictory
Death makes us feel alive
Lingering Soul

3 Years Ago

Its the one thing
That if i were to speak of i would never feel alive
Just end up cryi.. read more
Ashwin Thakur

3 Years Ago

Death makes us cautious
It teaches us to live
Because if we knew that our death is ro.. read more
I like the thoughts and places you took me.
"The lord is always watching
Those birds who wanted to fly
Thier wings cutted down
We offer our deepest mourns"
Death should not be sadness only. We hope our elders have reached a better place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.

Posted 3 Years Ago

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Added on April 25, 2015
Last Updated on April 25, 2015
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Ashwin Thakur
Ashwin Thakur

Mumbai, India

I am passionate for my writing as everybody here would be and i am looking forward to improve in every aspect of this beautiful art more..