Alone

Alone

She sat within

Her snow-bed…

Cold blue crystals

Shimmering in the sunshine,

Echoing through glacial walls.

 

Alone

Is better

She mused as her

Happy snowflakes

Danced gracefully, gleefully

Around her pale face.

 

Alone

Means she can feel…

Not conceal

The storm in her heart

That once tore

Her world apart.

 

But…

 

Alone

Means no other

To laugh with,

Who will plan

Whether or not they wanna

Build a snowman.

Author's Note

Thoughts? Improvements?

Reviews

[Lady Glitter]

My fav stanza is this:

",,,Alone
Means she can feel…
Not conceal
The storm in her heart
That once tore
Her world apart..."

I agree that feeling the need to conceal emotions in the presence of others can wreak havoc in a person's life. There's a sorrowful element to this poem, in that the person has not found anyone with which to be real.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Sandi,it really is true, which is why we must find those who we can be real with.

[Swetha]

wow! really liked this poem. it's about one of my favorite movies...thanks for making me remember!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you for reading it! I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Angelove]

This reminds me of the movie "Frozen". Its a great write!
Your words flow at the right pace. Keep it up girl!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you dear, you are exactly right, it is a Frozen inspired piece.

[BennyBooth]

Wow, I feel so lonely :( .... I really enjoyed this. I couldn't help but relate it to Frozen but that made even more interesting! Loneliness when captured can be so beautiful! Thanks for this one... :)

[Ashira Macy]

You are exactly right! Congratulations, not everyone caught my salute to Frozen. =)

[Shapirta]

its pretty good. by that i mean REALLY good. it kind of reminds me of frozen, but it doesn't take away the poeticness of it. great job! never mind, just realized it WAS of frozen, lol. pretty impressive sum up of elsa's brain

[Ashira Macy]

Glad you liked it! I figured someone of your age had to have seen Frozen. (I am a super Disney fan, so every once and a while I have to get some inspiration from a flick.) I connect with Elsa a lot, so I felt she deserved a little poetry. =)

[Shapirta]

i watched it 7 times, lol

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, I know what you mean. I can't even count how many times I watched it. =)

[Shapirta]

fist bump!

[Ashira Macy]

Whoop whoop!

[Arrinae]

This is inspired by 'Frozen's' Let it Go, correct? Regardless if it is, it is well written and well put together. The imagery is beautiful, and what made me think of Frozen to begin with. Thank you for sharing!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Kayla, you are the first person to see the frozen reference in there. Very good observation. Glad you enjoyed it!

[Arrinae]

You're welcome. =)

[John Preston]

Why try and improve
you wrote from within
let it be as it is
it reads just fine

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks John, that is great to hear!

[John Preston]

As you build it great
but in the end
just wet in the sand
Then gone
to return as ?

[Priscilla Nishi]

Lovely poem.I love the ending

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much, glad it called to you. =)

[Sophy Freebirds]

I felt that this piece was for some legendary character- who was banished from the world and cursed not to feel any emotions. I don' t remeber his name but they are normally called dream hunters in greek mythology.The word " alone" is repeated which enhances its impact in making the reader realise how desperately lonely the person is.. the last stanza of nobody there to help her with making us known how sshe misses the warmth of home.The vast strech of snow just adds more charm to the loneliness in this poem. ;)

~Sophy

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Sophy, I am glad this one called to you. You are right, this was written for a legendary character of sorts. =)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yeppee.. glad i am a smart cookie.. ha ;) it was a pleasure

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

This piece is striking in that it paints an image at first of an entity much like some ancient ice queen that had left the world of man and the loss of love that they had felt. Yet, in the last stanza, in the use of the slang form of "wanna" and bringing into the image, that of a snowman, you really show us that it is the voice of one's inner child, the part that needs warmth, the hand held and the shared footsteps.

Great Poem! I really liked it! =D
Hugs! - Kate

[Ashira Macy]

Hi Kaitlynn, thank you for reviewing this! I am so glad you caught that childish slang in there, that is a very important element. =)