A cute Girl

THis is about When I first saw my First Love... What I had felt... Love you..

One day , In my class
I saw a cute Girl
She was so Charming
and Shining Like a Pearl

She was new
and known by few
She had Smile on her face
With a Blushing Blue Dress

Something I Felt
This type of situation

I Never had Dealt

I went to her

And whispered in her ear

"An Apple a Day

 Keeps Doctor Away,

 You Stay Blessed

 I Wish and I Pray"

 I think...

 It's not my Word

 But my Heart wants to say:

 You are the reason

 Why I start my Day!

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

The more I read, I understood better...
Last night someone told me "life is too short to over think"
And see, I assure you, there are lots of happiness waiting for you.....
And with time, you're moving towards those.....
I never said against her... nor will I. Because I know she is special to you.. and your special being is my special being too...
but one thing I say is that coin has both sides....
you are seeing only one...
the next side is unseen...
Aau Kichi kahibini....
bas etiki, bcz I can't make u understand, hope u get what u deserve... hope u get ur happiness soon...

[Taniska 😊€..]

I like your poem ,keep writing 😊.

[Ayushi Beura]

"You are the reason
Why I start my Day!"
honesty is thoroughly expressed
loved each line
ur way of writing poem is unique n really impressive...glad to read it

[Ashish]

Thanks... :)

[Ayushi Beura]

my pleasure :)

[Manisha]

this is so sweet and heart touching poem....
beautiful penned....I enjoyed reading...

[Ashish]

Thanks Manisha :)

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jac..]

A sweet and touching poem that's straight to the point but not lacking emotion. I liked the ending most of all, saying one thing but secretly wanting to express much more. I think everyone has had a crush/loved someone that didn't know or they never told them. It's best to take that first step, you'll never know unless you try. Thank you for sharing this!

[Ashish]

Thank you Jack... :)
I am glad that you like this piece

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)]

I do and you are welcome!

[Kevin Gerardo]

So simple yet so sweet. Love the way you create your poem

[Ashish]

Thank you Kevin :)

[tanmay7551]

Good rhymes and these simple words shows lot of innoncence and says 'Have Fun' ...

Cheers for your first encounter with LOVE!

[Ashish]

Thank for reviewing tanmay

[Swati Nayak]

nice poem.Loved the pick up line.

[Ashish]

Thank you swati :)

[barleygirl]

This is a nicely revealing heartfelt message to one's crush. I can feel a bit of shyness thru your words. The last stanza (which is the best part of your poem) could be a little more clear if the punctuation was changed as such:

"An apple a day
keeps the doctor away,
you stay blessed, I wish
and pray"
I think . . .
It's not my word
but my heart wants to say:
You are the reason
why I start my day!

And use italics for this part:
You are the reason
why I start my day!

[Ashish]

Wow.. I hadn't think about that earlier.. Thank you so much for reviewing.. I had done the changes :)

[barleygirl]

Thank you for considering my suggestion. I really like the way that part goes now. It's the strongest part of your message & now very clear too.

[Ashish]

Thank you for correcting me ..these small things are the ornamental things in my opinion..
And I am happy that you feel my words ..that means a lot to me

[Maddy Raye]

This is really sweet. I bet you whoever this girl is would really like this poem. Nice work. :)