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The war between us

The war between us

A Poem by Atashusi





My enemy,

We are fighting. But we don’t know for what are we fighting for. The blood is falling from the sky, there aren’t raindrops anymore. Our hearts are frozen, and our eyes are suspecting a storm.

O enemy,
Our souls will go to Heaven and our bodies lost in war. Let’s keep our hands

together, and combine our souls in one. Let’s be stronger, and resist.

There is still hope, my enemy. Let’s drop our swords, and stop the storm.


© 2017 Atashusi



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This is a great piece of work and a powerful message conveyed too! We can only attain peace by holing hands together and bringing down the swords..

"The blood is falling from the sky, there aren’t raindrops anymore. Our hearts are freezed, and our eyes are suspecting a storm."

Touching lines.. Good job! 👍


Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

2 Days Ago

Thank you :)
YumnaKay

2 Days Ago

You're welcome! ☺



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I enjoyed this piece. The flow is lovely and you conveyed yourself well with a powerful message and even better emotions...well done

Posted 5 Hours Ago


great message
good inputs and weaving of thoughts

Posted 20 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

17 Hours Ago

Thank you!
Wonderfully put, I like how you turned this request for an enemy into a poem! Lovey!!
Well wrote

Posted 1 Day Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

1 Day Ago

Thank you!!
Joey Nizz

1 Day Ago

ur welcome, and thank you for sharing this!
This reminds me of an old kung-fu love story. I really enjoyed it, the only thing I would recommend is changing freezed to frozen.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

2 Days Ago

Thank you:)
love love love this! omg.. I wish we all had this mindset. beautiful work!

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

2 Days Ago

Thank you:)
This is a great piece of work and a powerful message conveyed too! We can only attain peace by holing hands together and bringing down the swords..

"The blood is falling from the sky, there aren’t raindrops anymore. Our hearts are freezed, and our eyes are suspecting a storm."

Touching lines.. Good job! 👍


Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

2 Days Ago

Thank you :)
YumnaKay

2 Days Ago

You're welcome! ☺
This is such a beautiful message. I love it

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

3 Days Ago

Thank you:)
Such a strong message coming through these few words great job

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

3 Days Ago

Thank you:)
What a brilliant piece of poetry! This is one uplifting poem...There is eternal truth in this poem..I really loved this insightful poetry of yours, Atashusi :-)
Spreading the good words and perspective can do wonders. I hold the same view about the wars and those who participate in them.
Well done :-)

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

3 Days Ago

Thank you!
There's a strong message coming out through this lovely poem...well written
Our souls will go to Heaven and our bodies lost in war. Let’s keep our hands

together, and combine our souls in one. Let’s be stronger, and resist.

There is still hope, my enemy. Let’s drop our swords, and stop the storm.
The lines above is marvellous

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Atashusi

3 Days Ago

Thank you so much!

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